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Margie

Margie
I was dreaming of heaven

 Last night when I pray
When off in the distance
I heard someone say

♥

Tell my Margie be careful

Don't take a chance
Fore when we're together
We'll have that last dance

♥

And as he rode off
I heard him to say
Tell Margie be happy
Enjoy everyday

♥
Live life to its fullest
Until that final day

When I ride down
And carry my Margie
♥

Away
Away


© 2008

Author notes

By ~ Maxboy
Background By ~ Little Feather

I wrote this for my sweet-sweet friend and inspiration Margie. A lady of ladies.
Her late husband was a retired motorcycle cop, so I used the term ride.



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  • Guerrero
    May 26

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    love it. i love the visual and the mental effect it gives. the feeling of passion between two ppl is hinted at and the desire for the other is strong. nicely written


    • Maxboy gold member
      June 4
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      Thank you very much for your wonderful comment, I am pleased you enjoyed my write.



  • doolie gold member
    January 16

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    A beautiful write sweetie. Margie is indeed a special lady. It's been awhile since I read this and it brings back the tears that I shed when I first saw it.
    Good luck in the contest.


    • Maxboy gold member
      January 16

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      Thank you very much sweetie, for your wonderful comment, she will always be very special to all of us that know her.

      Thank You


  • daviscth silver member
    January 16

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    Oh how beautiful this is and congrats on winning a golden cup with it. I love the imagery and the way you ended it reminded me of riding off into the sunset with your soul mate. Thanks for the entry.


    • Maxboy gold member
      January 16
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      I am so happy you enjoyed my write, thank you for your warm and wonderful comment.



  • whits end silver member
    December 13, 2008
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    What a beautiful dedication. Very well written, but was this an actual dream you had?


    • Maxboy gold member
      December 13, 2008
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      Thank you for your wonderful comment. This beautiful lady is in my thoughts so much but now that you ask and I think about it, no this was not an actual asleep dream. Please feel free to remove it or I can. I am sorry I didn't put more thought into this before entering.



  • Ignored
    November 28, 2008
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    Thanks for entering!

    This is definitely what im looking for! Great Job! PERFECT!


    • Maxboy gold member
      November 28, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the applause and your wonderful comment, I am very happy you enjoyed my poem.



  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    Awe what a sweet inspiration.
    It flowed so well and this person you speak i hope she knows that you love her so?
    Very heartfelt and emotional!
    Thanks for entering and good luck.
    -Mandi


    • Maxboy gold member
      November 9, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and the applause, I am pleased you enjoyed my poem.


  • Judith Chandler
    October 17, 2008

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    On first reading, I wasn't sure if this was really what I wanted. But I can see now that it's relevant to the theme of not going "gentle into that good night." "Life to the fullest/Until that final day."

    Thank you for entering my contest.

    • Maxboy gold member
      October 17, 2008
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      Thank you very much for your comment, I am happy, you read it the second time.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    Heartfelt, a special lady who clearly you love and treasure.
    Love the flow of this and the emotions from within
    Well done on Gold hun
    It was so deserved
    A beautiful poem

    Julie


    • Maxboy gold member
      October 8, 2008
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      Thank you Julie, she is so special to me and I just love her to pieces.

      Thank you
      Don


  • KyleBerg gold member
    October 8, 2008
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    Hey Maxboy, I am sorry to be a bother, but i felt i needed to comment on this poem again. I gave it gold in my contest, congrats I just wanted to tell you that this is one of only a very few poems i have read that really stuck in my mind...

    The other day i actually woke up to the words "Margie... I was dreaming of heaven" and that's when i knew that you were going to win my contest. This poem contains such subtle power within its elegant lines.

    Thank you again for entering and allowing me the opportunity to read your wonderful poem.
    from Kyle


    • Maxboy gold member
      October 8, 2008
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      Never a bother Kyle, I am so happy this poem touched you, it has always been one that held so much meaning to me. I wrote it for my dear friend Margie that is 85 years old, her late husband was a retired motorcycle cop, there is the term "When I ride down and carry my Margie Away Away. This will mean so much to her family, Margie has never seen it, it was written for her to be read later.

      Thank You Kyle
      Don


      • KyleBerg gold member
        October 8, 2008

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        No problem
        It was a pleasure.
        I have no doubt that she will love it when you choose to give it to her.


        • Maxboy gold member
          October 8, 2008
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          Thank you Kyle, I would have shown it to her, but here family is afraid it might cause her to want to join her husband to soon. Margie is such a beautiful person, being an ex biker babe, [as I call her] I asked her to show me her tattos but they said they would have to iron out the wrinkles first.

          Thanks Kyle
          Don


  • KyleBerg gold member
    September 25, 2008
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    I really liked the simplistic beauty of this poem and i could feel the emotions coming across. I liked the "we'll have our last dance" line the best. Thanks for entering and good luck


    • Maxboy gold member
      October 8, 2008
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      !!! WOW !!! Thank you so very much for the Gold Trophy, I am so pleased you liked my poem so much.

      Thank You
      Don


    • Maxboy gold member
      September 25, 2008
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      Thank you very much for the wonderful comment. I am pleased you enjoyed my poem.


  • Christina-is-crazy
    September 20, 2008

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    This is a really beautiful poem!!!
    I really do like It,
    I love poems that rhyme and that arnt to long!!
    and that i dont have to go look up the words lmao,
    Nice poem.
    thanks fer entering my contest


    ~christina

    • Maxboy gold member
      September 20, 2008
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      Thank you very much for your wonderful comment.

      Don


  • Silly Rabbit.
    July 3, 2008

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    This is beautiful in every way. Such a touching piece that put a smile on my face. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest =]

  • Fitz1901
    July 3, 2008
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    What a sweet and simple poem. it had me smiling.

    Thanks for entering


  • JustFallingApart
    June 22, 2008
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    how very sweet, i realt enjoyed this, your person must be someone realy lucky to have you


  • Shancy Fayre
    June 20, 2008
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    A nice job... Shancy.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    June 20, 2008
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    Thanks for sharing this - it sounds like a lovely experience.

    • Maxboy gold member
      June 20, 2008
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      Thank you very much for the comment. Yes, she is a wonderful lady.


  • BlackSwan
    June 19, 2008
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    Very well done, sweet, heartfelt and I really enjoyed the rhyming!

    -GL in contest


  • Tercil gold member
    June 19, 2008

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    This is an ideal and fondest memory, something that all of us must keep one day in our lives, nicely put as well.

    • Maxboy gold member
      June 19, 2008
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      Thank you very much for the nice comment and the applause.

  • kales4
    June 18, 2008
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    Thank you for entering my contest. Nice write and good luck


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    Simple and poignant

    with an old-fashioned diction, good meter and rhyme.

    Being centered is helpful, I think.

    Thank you for entering this poem. Enjoyable. Smile

     

    Lyndon of the Winklings. WinkWinkWink

    • Maxboy gold member
      June 17, 2008
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      Thank you very much for the great comment and the applause.
      MAXBOY


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 16, 2008

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    awww this makes me want to cry, I feel that Margie has lost you or the persona through death and she will see you once more...

    • Maxboy gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Thank you for the very nice comment and for putting on the contest.


  • individuality gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    a good piece, light and airy and smiling though i would suggest for future poems not to have all capitals.


    • Maxboy gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Yes, my famous all capitals. Being new to the internet, as well as poetry, I did not know I was yelling when I loaded the first ones. A carryover from my architectural drawing style of writing for forty-nine of my sixty-four years. I plan on changing them, but I keep entering them in contests, and I understand you should not make changes after entering a contest. What do you think I should do?
      Thank you for the suggestion, great comment and all the applause.


  • creationsfromheart
    June 6, 2008

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    Hello, this is a sweet poem and full of heart and meaning, the all capitials did not bother me at all please know that I did not base the judging of the contest on this when it was judged there were 2 other Anon judges to decide the winners. The reason it had not placed was only because the contest that was held was looking for writes inspired by the son one day at a time. The only mistake that I would suggest fixing is this one line you have to there and you do not need it, other then that it is a beautiful write and I am happy to ee you online and writing sharing thoughts and feelings and touching anothers heart for me is what writing is all about. I also had commented on this write, I am sorr\y it did not show up sometimes I get kicked off and don't know it did not post and for that I apoligize. But it is a beautiful write, just remove the to from this one line and it will read smoothly...I HEARD HIM TO SAY
    I heard him say...

    Thank you again for entering and welcome to online and AP


    • Maxboy gold member
      June 7, 2008
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      creationsfromheart

      Thank you for the comment. I did not question the placing, I would never do that, only that this was the only one not commented on. I am new to this, and so, I was curious. I do value the advice, any time I can get it. I was not expecting the applause, but I do thank you for it. Thank you very much for the suggestion.

      MAXBOY


  • tehzeeb
    May 31, 2008
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    this is nice. i am speechless.

    • Maxboy gold member
      May 31, 2008
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      tehzeeb

      Thank you very much for the complement. I am very happy you liked it.

      MAXBOY


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    May 29, 2008

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    I'm sorry, I can't consider this poem. The rules stated not to enter something that's been entered over 3 times. It's a lovely sentiment, though.


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 30, 2008
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      Luna Tique Fringe

      Very sorry, I misread the rules. I have removed it from the contest. Again, I am sorry.
      MAXBOY


  • 2lullabyhaven
    May 28, 2008
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    Margie, aye? A nice tribute to her; Thanks for your entry and good luck lol


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 30, 2008
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      2lullabyhaven

      Thank you so much. This is my first trophy of any kind. That means so much to me and will always remain my most memorable.

      Thank You Again
      MAXBOY


  • blur
    May 27, 2008
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    you should enter this in a contest...lol


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 30, 2008
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      blur

      Thank you, I did and just received my first trophy,an honorable mention.
      Thanks
      MAXBOY

  • tillybabe
    May 25, 2008

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    this is really good probably my favourite poem of yours so far. . . it gave me goosebumps


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      hidingbehindamask

      Thank You. She is such a dear friend of mine, now 85. This is the only poem for her that she will not see.
      Thank you for the encouragement.

      MAXBOY

  • Bob Fox
    May 25, 2008

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    My

    How sweet a poem and Like the song goes.. Mrgie, i am always dreaming of ya... this is a smiler for me. Nicely done. Not to mention my moms name was Margie


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 25, 2008
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      Bob Fox

      Thank you so much. I am happy that my poem holds a special place in your heart as it does mine. My Margie is the sweet, 85 year old, inspiration for many of my poems.

      Thanks Again
      MAXBOY


  • liaanne
    May 24, 2008

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    Wow. My words can't even start to describe how romantic and sweet. I loved all the words, It made me think. I loved it, Great job.


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 24, 2008
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      liaanne

      Thank you for the words of encouragement. It always means so much for one of your creations to please others.

      Thanks
      MAXBOY


  • only1love4ever
    May 21, 2008

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    Only1love4ever-Reply

    Wow, that is the sweetest poem ever. You must really enjoy Margie as a best friend. You write for her a lot and hopefully you have shared some of these poems with her. If you have I am sure they are one of her finest treasures. It is wonderful that you are so caring and loveing and devoting.

    Thank you very much.
    All of these have been so lovely.
    Have a wonderful day.
    God Bless.
    ~Only1love4ever


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 21, 2008
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      only1love4ever

      Thank you. Yes, I have shared these with her. Some are framed on her wall. She tells me they are very special to her. Her daughter said, her dad Ray, Margie's late husband would write poetry for her. I have not shared this one with her. I thought it best to save this one for later. For a time when I would be to sad to write anything, for her or for anyone else, for awhile. Thanks Again.

      MAXBOY


  • Blooming Poet
    May 19, 2008

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    This is so sad. I am going to start crying in a minute. This moved me and touched me so much, thanks for entering


    • Maxboy gold member
      May 19, 2008
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      Poetic Grace

      Margie
      Thank you. I wrote this and several others inspired by this sweet sweet lady. I am so glad to have her as a friend. lol
      Thanks Again

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