Global Warming.. is a big issue all around the world.
Pole caps are melting.. oceans are rising.. animals and
Humans are losing life for sure..
We keep driving cars, flying planes, burning fuels,
digging up mines, drilling oil, natural gas, on and
on, all for a rich mans Cure..
Now our weather is not right.. there is disasters
everywhere, war.. destruction and people just
does not care.. unless they are There..
I am an American.. I cry then pray, for your poor
Countries every day.. I see your devastations..
Your hurts, your Pains..
This world is not getting better.. its like God is mad at us
For what the greedy has done.. making money off the
Earth.. all the wars is not what we Want..
FOR SURE
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Comments
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Bravo!
There are so many humans that we out weigh the
balance of other species. As the animals die we will die. We have acted like gods for 10,000 years when we came up with this idea of controling agiculture to feed and to take away. From this thought, we thought we could control nature, other species, our earth, other planets and even our sun. Now we realize that we can not play god because no matter what we do the oceans keep riseing, the pole caps keep melting, and civilizations keep dieing.
Bravo!
Betsy Holzner
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Well, it certainly ...
is spot on as far as the premise goes. However, the punctuation is sadly lacking, and you need to fix a few other things. Here:
there is disasters (there are disasters)
here:
For what the greedy has done.. (what the greedy have done)
here:
all the wars is not what we Want.. (wars are not what we want)
and you need to fix the punctuation. The ellipsis: ... (three periods, not two)
Other than that, this is a fairly good job.
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