This knife cuts deeper
Than any wounds I inflict
This Kiss burns deeper
Than hot pokers on the lips
My heart slows
My mind is numb
But when I dream
I dream of love
Your arms wrapped around me
Your breath in my ears
But you never even loved me
You said you never could
You said that it was amusing
To make me cry
You said that it was funny
That I beleived every lie
You left my heart dieing
When you walked away
So now I loose love like blood
From every wound you made
I bleed out slowly til
I'm left with only a grave
Author notes
my heart is shredded I was two monthes away from marring him
A contest entry
- Make Me Cry by Blooming Poet.
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ooch, this is breathtaking. filled with such agonizing emotion, it really puts the reader in your place. i loved the simplicity of this, it had a nice flow, and no discernable rhyming, which i tend to like. this was lovely, thank you.
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Excellent!
oh wow! it feel like I can relate to this perfectly in so many different situations in my life but at the same time it's comletely different. I am so sorry honey you must have been in a lot of pain. I love this write, you have a beautiful way of expressing yourself, It felt as if I could feel your pain through your words so well. those first four lines had a powerful effect on me, very nice work
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This may sound like I am your mother, but hurting yourslef will not help you heal, it will only make things worse
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