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Living in your memory

Its been months since I've seen your face,
felt your breath on my neck,
curled into your embrace.

Its been months since I
kissed your lips or cried
on your broad shoulders.

You ask me,
Am I excited to see you again
and I have to laugh.

Words cant even express
the longing I feel.
Like parched flower for rain
I need your touch.

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A physical connection is not everything but it sure isn't nothing either

Would another metaphor serve better? If you have an idea please share it

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  • Yemassee gold member
    June 1, 2008

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    Your author note is cute, and quite true too.

    Of course that physical relationship, will and should lead to a deeper connection, and when met with mutual respect, well, you're probably about 2/3 of the way to a great relationship before to even enter in any other factors. Spoken by a guy who can't keep a relationship going for long so maybe you want to ignore this comment, lol.

    Parched flower. I can sense that need, that desire, that want, but I bet it's more than physical, there's so much wrapped up in being with that special person...again, you may want to take all this with a grain of salt.




  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    May 27, 2008

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    This is a beautiful but sad poem. I think I know just how it feels....

    Hope will keep you going....
    Good luck in love, life and in this contest,
    XXJeannette


  • wattle silver member
    May 21, 2008
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    Ms Sarah you speak the truth and share it with we lesser folk. Thank you.


  • ladylyric
    May 20, 2008

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    How beautifully sad. Longing for a loved one is one of the worst feelings in the world, though the re-connection of a loved one is one of the greatest feelings God has ever given to us. Great piece old friend!


  • Robin Candor
    May 19, 2008

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    This is perhaps as good as it gets. I would long for such sentiment myself. Your love is worded well and your hope and longing is worded equally as well. I pray for the day that your dreams are fulfilled and all is back to what you would deem as normal. May he return soon, and tell him a poet friend of yours is proud of him as well. I'm glad I crossed both of your paths. RC


  • catz Moderators member
    May 19, 2008

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    A poignant expression of loneliness and longing. It's something just about all of us have been through and you've made us feel it through your words.

    Good luck in the contest

    Dee


  • queen Moderators member
    May 18, 2008

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    This is a good poem, missing someone is one of the lonliest feelings thank you for entering and good luck in the contest

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