Life's unexpected U-turn
leaves her used
catering to others needs
She abandons her dreams
alone
dark smoke blends into her sihouette
as she finds true pleasures
from sucking on the head
of her regrets
Author notes
pic prompt 20-30 words
**credit pic
A contest entry
- Quickie****** by delightfulmess.
450 points, ended May 18, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gimme your greenies by crazymomma.
300 points, ended August 11, 2008, 58 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh I really enjoyed this. Years of abuse left me feeling this way for many many years. This is just great and so descriptive. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Perfect, gritty picture of "damaged goods" syndrome in which people come to believe that they are not worthy of good things in life because something bad has happened to them. You have created a snapshot of an entire life and the reader ends up knowing this woman by the end of the poem. I especially like the first line as well as the last two. "Life's unexpected U-turn" is perfect. Also well done is the notion of "sucking on the head of her regrets." Perfect response to the picture.
Garrison
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Yeah ... this is it each line you wrote was me to a T-
That U-turn in our life seems to be at times just this
thanks for the share and once again great write ...Millie
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Thank you for your comments...Glad you could relate to my poetry. well, better if you related to a more optimistic one! lol.
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Ooooh I like this!!!
Great take on the pic.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Delila
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Ahh I think I have been there!! Abandoning dreams for others... wonderful take on this pic!!
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