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Matters of the Heart

I was trying to find you
when the sky sent warmth to May,
and all my scattered clouds
have gone a sullen gray

I needed to be fearless,
and slip into life, feeling free
because it was not
about looking for you,
as it was about finding me

You so easily planted a seed
that curled around my heart,
then squeezed joy into all my places,
tracing truths right from the start

I was lifted with a light as bright
as nodding sunflowers 'neath
an azure sky,
but I will walk the rocky road
across the nape of twilight,
if you will just stay by my side

My Cherie amour, you touched me
like the listening of an old soul,
then folded me in your arm's embrace
with tales yet to be told

With my fears upfront, you took me
and rearranged my feelings
and then threw them up like feathers
lightening my doubts by my revealings

your eyes twinkle is mixed with mischief,
your blonde hair is filled with fire,
while ripples in my blood stream,
are but widening circles of desire

You say "I am the merest breath away..."
My plea "Please, breathe your love on me"



 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: 'Songbird' by Eva Cassidy.
lyrics link- http://www.lyrics007.com/Eva%20Cassidy%20Lyrics/Songbird%20Lyrics.html

Background: Courtesy of Cannonsfire.

This is about a special someone
and how her enthusiasm and Love has touched my life.
I was inspired by: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4241720 Thanks, C.
she knows who she is, and so do I.

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  • Superb

    A wonderful romantic write. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
  • Wow This Is A Great One,, I Hope That You Do Well In Contest Good Luck x
  • There were a couple of places that I had to go back and reread, but then it sung to me after a reread. You don't need me to do that though as I am sure you could do it yourself and discover what I'm talking about. I am rarely critical about form anyway. Having said that this is another divine write filled with romance. I still keep hoping I can produce anything that resembles this. RC


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 19

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    I love Eva Cassidy's Songbird (someone once said it was written for me, lol)

    "about looking for you,
    as it was about finding me"

    Isn't that the most wonderful feeling, and even more wonderful when you find yourself in someone else too. Lovely poetry that really sings a happy song - from one songbird to another. Great to see you smiling, Nicky - truly - and that she is smiling too!!

    This one just made my eyes all soft...



    ~ Nicolette

  • Another day to smile is coming up, now that I have read this...I think I am way too high on your pedestal but I am not afraid of heights. I just hope that I don't fall in your eyes, will try not too Love, Chez

  • Bob Fox
    May 18

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    Way to go

    Now this is a true love poem. Written the way they are meant to be. even I, a skeptic about love feel a wramth in my heart. a wonderful write deserving to be noticed by all poets

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  • WOW!!!!

    That was amazing it was so beautiful I think I fell in love with it, it is exactly how I feel right now with someone else, thank you for such a great write, I am pretty sure that will win the contest, good luck in it

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  • Don't try so hard

    If you're going to go with a rhyme scheme, you should stick to it with a set rhythm...otherwise, it just gives the entire poem a forced, inauthentic feeling. (Rhyming "heart" with "right from the start" to me just screams "cheesy pop song"). However, you have some good lines in here, in the third stanza especially--I say, stick with your own unique imagery rather than relying too heavily on love song magnetic poetry.
  • Ah..you are so true while describing the love and bringing the joy of the heart in the poetic journey my friend..well done...
  • mmook
    May 18

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    excellent expression and flow... well done! full of strong emotion and very passionate.. thanks for sharing

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