I thought you loved me
I thought you cared
But I guess you never did
You said we’d always be together
You said you’d always care
But I guess you changed you mind
I thought we shared something
I thought we were a good for each other
But I guess it isn’t so
I helped when you were in need
I listened when you needed a friend
But never again
When you were sad I held you in my arms
When you needed help I worked you through
But you will now seek comfort in the arms of another
You were always there when I needed you
You always knew how to comfort me
But you left me all alone
You were my sweetheart
You were my girl
But now you are just a memory
I remember the time we spent together
I remember our happiness
And my last memory of you
is that sweet smile upon your face
Author notes
i was almost moved to tears as i wrote this
Comments
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Excellent
A very final good by to an old love, thins we said in our youth were so sincere,very little comes to pass as we visualize it then.
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Sometimes things were ment at the time and believed to be true such as "we'd always be together," and "always care". Then something happened that just changed it all. This was extreemly hard for me to read because it was so sad, and so loving. Great work my friend.
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i love it
simple heartfelt words that create a bittersweet but beautiful image
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Trust me when I say I understand this pain, and it sucks. Kudos to you for dealing with it through poetry so that others can relate. The poem itself needs a little work, though. It seems a bit plain, and a little cliche. Also, it more or less lacks style. As all the other comments make clear, everybody feels this. What makes your situation unique? Why should I care? Reading this as is makes me think that you are just one more person that's been screwed over, so welcome to the real world. I don't feel your pain as intensely as I could. Rework this, and I don't doubt you'll come out with something amazing. Good base to start from, though. : )
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keep writing and maybe u can make ur own book
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Very good! i think u want to make me cry. It just reminds me of the troubles with me and my bf. keep writing and let ur heart flow into your poems and you could make some great poems!
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THis brings me to tears... I know what this feels like... Except.. it just flip-flop your situation... I thought we were perfect...and he left me...
I wish the last memory I had of him was his smile...But it's not.. It's of his tears flowing just as hard as mine were... Still today I don't understand why he walked away..leaving me for another...But he did... I guess it's just one of those things I'll never have complete understanding on.
Great job! Very emotive, love the flow, the words, the simple, aching beauty.
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this is so sad. how everything seems so right and then life throws us a curveball and we're like, what the hell?
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And... I was moved to tears, hence the fact I was already crying. This---it may be cliche but for me right now it is so real that I cannot help but cry, cannot help but feel the pain, the sadness and hurt in this.... What else can I say? This was very well written.
& if it was personal i hope you heal.
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almost great
"When you were sad I held you in my arms
When you needed help I worked you through
But you will now seek comfort in the arms of anoth"
pain a common emotion. been there before.memories hurt good and bad. that is why i wrote carries on. i don't want rewarded for my comment. but i believe this one is not finished there is more to this poetic story you just didn't tell it. i'd like to hear it. this was good almost great. i like this stanza. just finish the story and it would be great -
i know how you feel. It happens to everyone even to the best of people. Keep on writting i am really inspired by your poems. they are very good!
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This is very sad, i feel you deeply on this, pain of loss in love is great and heavy. but through it we grow stronger the fight the bigger battle when its really true.
Great write.
Sincerely,
Deathwolf Tasagka
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omg are you tryin to make me cry
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Wow!!!!!!!!! You should really enter this in Maximum's contest. It's called: Anything you want. You would do well. All the best for the future!!!!
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Very good! It's absolutely great when you can write something and be moved by your own work... quite a hard feat, if you ask me. But, then again, you didn't, did you?
Rock on--
Dawn
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I absolutely love this poem.. it leaves me wondering if it would be easier to not fall or if it really is worth it at the end? I'm very much left with questions which i think makes a great poem!
xxx
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awww...
see this is what I mean ...you write from the heart...that was sad....and even though you were hurt, you still care for this person....it seems....and now all is but a memory...very nicely written poem..you have alot of potential.....good work!
-Lu
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