Waterfalls are nice no matter
how much spice you use in addition
to chocolate lava which comes out
of a volcano cake nice and hot like
pudding
Burney Falls is nice any time of the day
Snoqualmie Falls is nice too, during the
day in Snoqualmie which is up in Washington
state and Niagra Falls are beatuiful at night
The photo looks like Burney Falls but I know it
could be another one which constantly throws water
down the hill regardless of any spectators although
only the ones who are in the lake below get wet
Water falls one of many natural wonders which can
not be easily explained and it is fortunate that
nobody has complained even though there is seldom
a swan or anthying nearby- water falls, one should
not go forever with out seeing one
Author notes
I haven't seen Burney Falls in many years, and it's been awhile since I saw one. Mr. Cat
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Well, as to your question ...
look at this:
a swan or anthying nearby- water falls, one should
do you really mean you can't see the typo? I see that below judyjudyjudy pointed it out. Also, in the next line,
without is one word, not two.
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This set of falls is on top White Pass on the east side two smiles or so before the summit.
Well done and excellent poem
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Thank you
Thank you!
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I notice ...
that you have had the typos pointed out and still have not fixed them. That does not look good at all. You also have broken the rules of this contest, since your poem is not punctuated.
That said, I like the idea of your poem, which begins rather well. Unfortunately, it doesn't follow through with the original promise, and the writing becomes rather disorganized at the end. I hope the poem is punctuated before the contest ends. -
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I have edited the poem, twice, now. I find no unfixed typos. Are you, perhaps, not refering to spelling?
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Typos: "throuws", "with out" - should be "without","anthying". I think that's it.
It's great that we can do all this wonderful poetry on the computer but it does seem to lead to more mistakes! My eye is drawn to it because I've done some freelance editing in my time.
Cheers.
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Ok, Judy, thank you. I fixed the spelling of throws out. I have a desire to see the other falls, myself.
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It sounds nice and you have left me with a desire to see Niagara Falls again. Haven't seen it in years. I used to enjoy that feeling of being lightly sprayed.
I hope you don't mind my pointing out that there a couple of typos.
jjj
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