You think you know him
If only you knew
The truth about what he is
A fire that will destroy your beautiful soul
You think he listens to you
If only you knew
He cares not what you have to say
Your mind is just a hurdle in his race for your body
You think he values you
If only you knew
You mean so little to him
Just another notch in a mile-long belt
You think he'll be there for you
If only you knew
When you need him the most
You'll be a tiny speck in his rearview mirror
You think he loves you
If only you knew
He has no heart to love with
Just a cavernous space full of brazen lust
You think there's noone better
If only you knew
I'm right here
If only I had the strength to tell you
A contest entry
- the hardest thing is watching him i say i love you to her by HereComesTheSun.
900 points, ended June 2, 2008, 32 entries
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Comments
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wow, so many people is telling me this about my boyfriend at the time being, but i just dont see it. he is sweet and caring to me. anyways. another great poem of yours. i liked how it had a great message in it. loved it. never a boring moment in it. i like this one part,
You think he'll be there for you
If only you knew
When you need him the most
You'll be a tiny speck in his rearview mirror
that is a very creative yet painful way to put it and i loved it.
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Hi Ali! I thought I wanted I decided to read this and I am glad I did. You wrote the emotions that certainly came out your way. Nicely done and quite moving. Good luck in the contest!
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i can really relate to this, the emotions expressed are raw and intense and i like the way you use direct address throughout to show how you really feel. think we've all been in a similar situation to this at one time or another, thanks for sharing it and describing it so evocatively.
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wow this is so powerfull and amazing and i hope i have a guy like you out there if you told her this she would be yours if i had any guy tell me this id be like wow your amazing wow so yeah WOW great write
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