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Terrycloth and Tears

We chased each other
in the summer sun,

our striped-towel capes
stolen from the linen closet
gave us super powers...

While yours provided invisibility -
mine allowed me to fly
up into the highest tree branches
to spy on the boys
hoovering around the bird bath...
whispering to each other
about how girls cant be superheros
because they would cry too much
and get hurt too easily
during important battles
with mutant aliens and giant ants...

And when you pulled your cape away
revealing your prescence too soon -
he pushed you down into the dirt
and ripped your dress...

Deafened by the roar of their laughter,
they didn't hear my battle cry,
as I lept from the highest branches -
fists balled and teeth clenched,
jumping through the air,
over Grandma's rose bushes -
ready to land with fists flying...

Only - I had overestimated
the power of the green striped terry cloth
tied around my neck -
and the boy's ability to cast spells
commanding all garden life
encompasing the bird bath
to protect them at all costs -
...even death.

But they had underestimated
the power of little girls -
when their sister's tears
required immediate warfare
for the sake of honor and love.

They stood wide eyed -
watching the blood
running down a torn knee
as I stood fuming with rage
oblivious to the wound
Id sustained during my flight...
trampling the fallen one
into the mud under my sandal.

And after their retreat -
your tiny hug nearly choked me,
proving to both of us
just how strong girls can be...

Then we wrapped ourselves
in your cape to hide us again -
as we pulled the petals
off the fallen rose lying at our feet -
just as broken as we were...

I have a scar on my right knee.
Two inches of jagged white,
that my razor knicks

every time I shave my legs...
and as I bleed tiny drops
onto new terrycloth towels
I am reminded -
just how strong we've had to be...
and wish -
that we could be invisible together
just once -
while our wounded hearts heal.

Author notes

I was looking at a photo of some roses - reminded me of this event in my life and now that my sister and I have had to deal with the death of our mother - I am really longing for those days, back when all that we needed was a giant invisibility cloak and a sister's hug to make the pain go away. I havent had a chance to be alone with my sister and really grieve our mother - in the 6 years since shes been gone. (work/school/kids/family commitments etc) - so I am going to try to get a weekend getaway for just her and I sometime soon..we both need to disappear together again...for just a little while.

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  • Emile
    May 20

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    Very Good

    Wonderful work with great thought given to the subject mater as it is gently unfolds for the readers delight. A window into the soul of the author that is pleasing to the heart. It tantalizes us with succulent imagery to seduce us with the nectar of poetic creativity. You have managed to capture the beauty of sisterhood and weave it into a poem that is easy to relate to and a delight to read. Good word choices seducing the reader with their gentle glow of remembered love.


  • Bean Sidhe gold member
    May 19

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    I am enchanted by this piece! I myself have two beautiful younger sisters & would not be who I am without them. You should consider sharing this with your sister - I'm certain it would help heal her heart as well. All my best!

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  • Excellent.

    I am always intrigued and pleasantly rewarded when I click on pieces like this. You wrote a beautiful and loving tribute about something in your life that was traumatic. What a wonderful but sad piece.

  • ferg silver member
    May 19

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    Real.

    Reading this I felt like I was vicariously sharing this memory with you. Childhood in all it's wonderful and sometimes life altering experiences mold us so profoundly, and only from a retrospective place of clarity do we begin to appreciate the full impact. There is a beautiful and inspiring beauty to the innocense and openess of the child's imagination, as you have so aptly demonstrated here.

    I salute you for your awareness and acknowledging the need to re-connect with your sister. This is real.

  • riley
    May 19
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    This is a very vivid poem, I could almost see you running around with your sister in my mind. I wasn't sure at first if you were talking about your mother or your daughter with the other person since both would have made sense.

    Very well written. Well done Jen, I really like this one, even more than your usual poetry, which I always like.


  • myrataal silver member
    May 19
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    What a wondrous entry, filled with "real" emotion ...

    and as your photos, snapshots flashed before my eyes like deeply imprinted images of soul.

    You were brave, you are still. Please give small hugs and big ones and share your sorrow ... and the peace of silent joy: to be forever linked with her blood.

    I loved the texturedness in the alliterative title. You are such an artist!


    Love you!

    Myra

  • obfuscate
    May 18

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    This is very good. It's exactly what I was looking for, and you chose an interesting feeling to convey, that sense of nostalgia. I'm so glad you entered the contest. I think this saved me from several terribly biting comments on other poems entered here which shall not be named, but can be easily identified, as they are so sweet and sticky they will make your teeth hurt. Lovely.
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