There's a place in this world
that's reserved for people like me -
people who can't seem to see
and may never breathe.
It's a frozen place
getting colder by the minute.
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Cold, stark and very effective. Great work poet!
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BRRRRR
That looks so devistatingly cold there I would freeze in a second .
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Yup. Thank God that ain't Michigan.
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wow great write!
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Oh wow-- i love this one!.
It so amazing!
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Keep of the great write!
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Thank you.
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That's beautiful and sad all at the same time && Yet most amazing poetry is.
Great write. Very emotional.
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This is scary, is it really that bad for you? But I guess it's true that some people never catch on, that's what people say about me sometimes, but I hope I'm not in this place and I hope you're not either. I would like to know more about the frozen place though. And what's in it, that could improve this wonderful piece even more, but that's just my opinion.
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I think you're right. Thank you for your honesty.
The frozen place is a place I sometimes feel I'm in when I've made a terrible mistake and don't want to admit it. It makes me doubt my compassion for others. I feel like I am put in this place when I have been wronged by others who refuse to admit their mistakes to me.
Excellent thought, I should incorporate this into the next poem. Thank you.
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I like the sever at the end - abrupt & sharp. I find it exceedingly hard to communicate my point in such a few number of words but you are able to do so with no wasted effort. Lovely!
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Thank you.
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you're only frozen if you want to be. light some matches and thaw out and get out there .
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Thank you, Kevin.
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Gorgeous.
This was great. The picture definitely helped to show what the words meant. Good Job. Hope you've been doing well.
-Jeremy
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Thank you, Jeremy.
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Intense raw emotion. Simple yet brilliant. A short effective piece welldone x
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beautifully simple.
the last line took my breath away. and we are all those people...
great write,
KNIGHT TIME
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I find this write of yours very interesting.
I think maybe is that place the place where we who refuse to believe what the masses are told is right or correct freeze in lonliness wondering if we are alone?
Well, that is what I drew from it... interested in the inspiration, the simplicity is actually warming... yet perhaps it is not as simple as one would see as they read?
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You may be overanalyzing this one a bit. It isn't meant to be much of a hidden meaning poem as it is a simple reflection of one looking in the mirror.
Thanks for commenting.
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OK
But, that is what I do...
If there was money to be made in overanalyzation I would be rich.
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I understand this. And i really like it.
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I wonder what or where this frozen place is?
It's really short, and to me feels like it's not finished..and ended up reading it a few times, wondering what the place may be. This brought me in, and your picture's nice too.
Hoping you are well
--Aden
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It's all I wanted to write. I rather fancy the abrupt endings.
Thanks. Hope you're doing fine also. 
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