You told me that you love me
And that set my heart aglow.
I love you too, sweet Baby.
And I want you to know.
I think of you each night and day.
These thoughts consume my soul.
I love you, need you, want you
But, I must maintain control.
I n’er thought it would happen.
Thought these feelings were all gone.
But you’ve put a smile upon my face,
And in my heart, a song.
You have revived emotions
That I thought were long dead.
You know, you own my heart, girl.
I am half out of my head.
So, now where do we go, Babe?
Should we cast aside our fear?
Should we jump in this together?
Or lay low to avoid the tears?
Each day it just gets harder
The longer we remain apart.
I want to share my life, my love
With the girl that owns my heart.
Author notes
Gizmobob
A contest entry
- Love Pre Write Party by rose petal desires.
370 points, ended May 28, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite only by kitty23.
470 points, ended June 6, 2008, 68 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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how very sweet, the girl who you wrote this to must be very lucky
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Oh My Gosh =)
I love this a lot
It's really good
I couldn't stop reading
I've read this like 5 times =)
Favorite Part:
You told me that you love me
And that set my heart aglow.
I love you too, sweet Baby.
And I want you to know.
I think of you each night and day.
These thoughts consume my soul.
I love you, need you, want you
But, I must maintain control.
Great write!
Thanks a bunch for entering
Good Luck
♥[Katee]♥ -
a beautiful love poem that reminds me of the saying "with eyes wide open" this speaks of fresh but cautious love. thank you for sharing this. you are very talented. keep writing! God bless you always
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sorry i was going to say i like that it isnt long but not short eighter i liked it alot
it expresses alot of emotions in it with in the little bit of line it has
thank you for sharing your poem with me
keep up the great work
kitty23
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this is really great
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nice thoughts here you put in to this contest i think you happen to have done a very great excellent job with this thanks for sharing petal desires
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i like this it was not long and all that crap to express your love if you know what i mean you did a very great excellent job with this hon good luck in the competition
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this is really great...
i love the almost lyrical tone this poem has..or is that just me. o well. this is a great poem and keep up the great work!
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the poem is good but what honestly stuns me is the ponctuations why all the "."!!
back to the poem it is great i love it!
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