I chewed tobacco when I was young
It sizzled, burnt, and spoilt my tongue
But now I'm older I do other things
That make me smile and spread my wings.
I chat online to fellow poets
who think I'm daft and don't they know it?
Yet smile I will and with a thrill
lead them up and down a hill.
A hill so tall it's like my stories
that suggest - all lies - I vote for Tories.
We love it so, this daftness driven
by moldy minds and odd ways to scriven.
So that's what I do this very moment
words played and woven in a torment
to please myself and many others
so we end as a Band of AP Brothers.
......and sisters, but it wouldn't rhyme.
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Author notes
That's how I felt, folks, and it took all my striving for ten minutes to produce this deep philosophical tract.
A contest entry
- Truth.. Quote Prompt.. by Angelflower.
713 points, ended May 25, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Appreciation!
Thank you Donald for this humorous contribution to The Poetic bandit's reading list, and congratulations on the HM
~Lilac
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This is great! I smiled and smiled. Thank you!
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That last line cracked me up! I think this is the first poem of your's, but definitely not the last. You have skills, mad skills 
Very well done! (Sisters rhymes with blisters, but I don't think that'd fit in here. 
) Thanks for sharing and congrats on the Honorable mention!
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Cute ending - have never smoked but think you write about it quite well in these lines. All grow up, some can quit quickly, others linger on or years, finally trying to quit and spending all kinds of money to do so.
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This is a cute poem... I really like the way it sounds out loud - and it seems that it would fit right in with my favorite book of poetry (called 'The Book of Nonsense')... anyway - I laughed when I read this and it definitely brought a smile to my face
Keep writing
Polly
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I think it is sweet to dedicate a poem to AP. I am pleased you are here to share your poems. Thank you.
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A very light hearted poem, nothing too surprising, but it was an enjoyable read!
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Nice poem, very unique (like it's author) and thought-out. A few words in there that I don't know the meaning of, but that's how we learn, right? By pulling out a dictionary! I always had a hard time with english. But anyways, enough rambling.
I love the ending...it made me giggle, just that one last line. Good way to end such a beautiful dedication. My favorite word that I've learned today is daft. I've heard it before but never really got what it meant until now.
Keep up the good work.
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Very engrossing opening line, and an amazing poem all the way through! I love the closing, too.
Great work, and thanks for sharing.
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You have written a candid poem showing warts and all, but that's what makes it charming and full of character(what a character...LOL). I like this poem, a bit unique from most that I read. Well Done!
Bandits Rock!
Dennis
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The height of cleverness is your final line-
This poem to me is about rhyme, or the struggle to be witty and rhyme in twenty minutes while making sense - does that make sense? Have done it myself, or tried to pull it off. For me "to scriven" was a stretch - like a ballplayer who just manages to catch a pop fly in his fingernails. It's what makes this poem funny. So the final line just makes it a better poem for me.
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So pleased when poets enjoy my playing with words, the poems might not be serious but my use of words always is. Joy!!
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I really enjoy poems with consistant meter and natural rhyming, and yours has both. Oh, the joys of anonymity on the internet -- tales get taller that than they could otherwise. This is an enjoyable piece!
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Lol.. I loved this!! you did a wonderful job..
And the ending was really cute!! I was smiling the whole time I was reading this..
You did a great job.. thanks for sharing this with us.
Best of luck..
Angel
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Nicely done. I remember chewing tobacco at an early age, kept me from chewing it later. I like a light hearted poem.
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Thanks for warm comments and being happy at my light-heartedness, so lighthearted, fillurhands, that I have never ever chewed tobacco, just a poetic licence/device. LOL
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Great stuff! If you wrote that in ten minutes then you are sharp as a tack my friend. Good luck in the contest!
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I was telling "porkies" it was actually twenty but ten seemed to me to have more impact (LOL)
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