Hey,grab two guns!
Don't you hate this feeling?
Well come on next to me,
Don't be scared.
Come now load the guns.
Now give em seven spins for luck.
Aren't they cold in your sweaty hands?
Well come on,
Lets start the gun.
I'll put my gun to your head,
You'll put yours to mine.
Cross armed together and,
Scared as hell.
We can barley hold them,
Shaking hands wont steady.
Well come on breath,
One last time.
Come now baby,
i know your thoughts are,
Racing in your head.
Now,
Steady your hands,
You might miss if you.
You feel like you can't Stand.
Your heats racing along,
To the beat of you sweat,
Hitting the floor.
Now come on,
Relax.
This will soon end.
the guns warm in my hands,
I look into you eyes.
Why not make this bitter sweet?
I know you wanna kiss me,
So lets.
You kiss me with passion,
our hands steady.
The guns still pointed to our heads.
Rose petals cover the floor.
lets make this moment sweet.
tears fall from your eyes,
and mine.
We pull back from each-other and whisper,
"I love you"'s
Time slows down as we,
Slip our fingers over the triggers.
One last time you think.
So you press your lips against mine.
Tears are pouring out now.
You whisper in my ear,
How much you love me.
I smile back weakly.
Now we share a silence.
can we rally?
Its so wrong yet....
You pull the gun,
from my hand.
You push them away in a shelf.
Much to my surprise your crying,
"Don't you ever..."
You choke out.
Racing hearts and,
Scared thoughts are gone.
For there ends it.
Author notes
Hmmm what an...odd poem huh? I guess this isn't for myself but for all the lovers out there!! I just wanted to do a poem based on the game Rusain Roullate,so I gave it a hit xD Enjoy
Do you like it????
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Wow
I totaly felt like I was there and my heart was racing this is really good -
i love this... its so true...love is like rusain roullate, and i got shot in the head... which means my hearts now shattered..
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aw! I'm sorry hun ]:
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this is cool- love it
inspired by Not good enough for truth in the cliché by ETF?
xoxo
stars
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o: I love that song! But no, I was actually watching TV and Bret Micheals came on and started singing and I put my hand to my head like a gun. xD And then I came up with this. O; Thankies for the comment.
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ohhh... I love that song too! ronnie-*kiss*
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gifted far beyond your years... beautiful and vivid.... and to be only 11, this is incredible!!!!
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thanks!(:
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wow, you are realllllyyyyy good to only be eleven
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Why not just put one in the chamber, and count to three?
Saves you the one last horror of watching the one you loves head explode in front of and all over your face as the last thing you see before you die.....especially if you have to wait a few pulls of the trigger til you find the round.
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thanks! :3
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Whoa...
Very fast paced... It draws you in and forces you to watch and wait. Good job
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dang this is amazingg. I love your style of writing.
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Bearly should be barely
This is a very interesting piece. Simply unique and a fast paced read. Excellent write for someone so young. I CANT BELIEVE YOU ARE 11.
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This is hard for me to critique, since I lost a friend to this 'game.' Never mix Vodka and guns. It was just the stupidist thing he did. Other than that, you most definately DID have my heart racing.
Rae
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This is a great piece for love!
Love and russian roulette can be metaphorically compared and it makes sense!
Great poem and perfect ending!
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The best of your's I've read so far
I was really scared they were going to pull their triggers. Lots of suspense! Brrr...
A few mispellings in a poem are no big deal unless you're going to submit it to some important magazine or something, but I'd fix the title: Russian Roulette.
The only place that it didn't flow was here:
Steady your hands,
You might miss if you.
You feel like you can't Stand.
Maybe add the word "shake" to the end of the second line?
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Oh thanks and that's a good idea =D
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Awwww I love how they didnt kill themself. I was really surprised. You had a few misspellings in it like you wrote "rally" instead of really but thats just a little mistake. Other than that it was amazing!
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love it so much
best poem EVER
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Very... good, I think it grasps the whole concept of it... amazing write!!!
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This is so in your face. I like it a lot. Great, great job. Keep writing
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i like it a lot its very dark and scary
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OMG! I LOVE IT! it's so sweet and scarey. It grips the reader from the beggining, and though I wanted to leave because I was scared how this would end, I couldn't stop reading. It was so well written and the images came so easily. And I love the ending, I'm so glad you chose to end it that way Not odd at all.
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Not at all ODD...this was lovely! I loved every minute of it! Great job
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