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Magic Unfurled in Stilly Night

 

If fair stars glitter in my eyes from you they're sent 'tis no surprise.

Magic unfurled in stilly night, imagination wings free flight,

Advances past life's present plight, to share with you new world's delight.

Unusual lustre in my eyes from you reflects as bright sunrise

Deft spins earth's orbit's winning skies, dark light returns with shared insight.

Each 'twenty-four' speed [s]print as one - see fairies' tasks are never done !

 

If fair stars' sparkle represents tenderness where each assents,

May verse returned to sender's plane retain the quintessential plain,

All's well, remains, each heart sustains through to, from, each, pane eases pains.

Unforeseen our recompense as new dreams span both 'whither' 'whence'

Dispersing day's incompetence, these energies increase, intense,

Effacing care and worries, - one from two may spring, from struggles, fun. 

If scintillation smoothes away the fuss, the cuss of dusty day,

Mending rays send fey touch bright, beam aura gold which somehow might

As epidemic, spread aright, for world polluted care, heal quite.

Unlooked for glister sent from you to you returns through interplay.

Dawn day prepares to permeate two tender hearts that chart shared fate,

Enchanted future cycle's spun through one in two, you too we won, won't be undone.

 

Author notes

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Moon Eugene Chan
http://flickr.com/photos/ceugene/1263632827/

Background
http://flickr.com/photos/joecollver/240090524/

starlight
http://flickr.com/photos/mattie_shoes/277000532/
The Pleiades are the 7 daughters of Pleione the sea nymph and Atlas,
In reality, the Pleiades are an open cluster of hundreds of stars who happen to be plowing into some interstellar hydrogen. The light from the stars lights up the dark hydrogen creating a reflection nebula.



(see also starlight)
http://flickr.com/photos/marcgutierrez/1120884620/

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  • Condemd RyeZing
    June 2, 2008
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    Nicely done. Beautiful poem.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    May 23, 2008

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    Line 1...perhaps a comma after 'you'

    Line 3...avances=advances? french?

    Line 8..."may verse returned to sender's plane retain the quintessential plain"

    Great line, although I admit I had to read it twice to
    keep from being tongue tied. I would love to hear Miss Doolittle recite it.

    Very nice play with words. Unique. Thank you for entering.


  • Room without doors gold member
    May 21, 2008

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    Outstanding

    I loved the way you brought the stars to life with some great imagery and added some musing to give the poem more depth. This is an enchanting poem full of light airy imagery that speaks out. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Night Hope gold member
    May 21, 2008

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    "all's well, remains, each heart sustains through to, from, each, pane eases pains.
    Unforeseen our recompense as new dreams span both 'whither' 'whence'
    dispersing day's incompetence, these energies increase, intense"

    One can only dream, dear Scribe...& work themselves to a frazzle, hoping truth will inevitably come from toil. This is a dazzling piece, my Friend...& there is no smoke blinding my eyes. Wanda


  • wendy
    May 19, 2008

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    You are always so amazing my friend. I like the background also. Lately,I've been seeing a lot of things representing life in phases. Sometimes we create our own magic through perception and sometimes through our intuition. This was one of those great works that I needed to read aloud and just sink my teeth into it.


  • frownsnfreckles
    May 19, 2008

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    a wonderfully positive piece concerning cares which pass with each new day, like the rebirth of the moon, at least that's how I understood it.

    'If scintillation smoothes away the fuss, the cuss of dusty day,
    mending rays send fey touch bright, beam aura gold which somehow might
    as epidemic, spread aright, for world polluted care, heal quite.'


  • SomethingLovely
    May 19, 2008

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    Fabulous!

    This is a wonderful poem. It's played out like a story, with words and pictures that lead the path to a great ending. I really felt this poem, it was brilliantly written. Good luck!

  • Raven Rose
    May 19, 2008

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    wow!.....

    i really liked this it somehow reminded me of shakepear... lol.... and i was filled with delight... you have a beatiful way with words..... and i felt like i was there in a different realm....


  • Triami Arack
    May 19, 2008

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    The background is eye catching, the imagery is very appealing, the words are carefully chosen, the subject is spectacular, the photos fit the poem perfectly, what else is there to say other than it was a good read and keep up the good work ppoet! I look forward to more!


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    May 18, 2008

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    Superb

    I love the imagery you created. Your talent is expressed very differently than mine, however, I always find something refreshingly new in each of your writes. Hope all is going well with you.


  • Lily of the Valley
    May 18, 2008

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    Magic was unfurled in this stilly night as I read this while listening to some very heavenly music. This whole page is heavenly with the flow of the words set on a beautiful background. The night skies are an amazing wonder to behold and a sight I often take time to enjoy. This poem is truly love in the heavens.

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