I am dark fantasy
Try to ignore
A beauty and terror
A friend but a whore
Skin soft and pale
Like moonlight white
Lips like red rubies
A sinful delight
Body so perfect
Shape so divine
Alluringly covered
With silk stained like wine
Eyes so hypnotic
Draw in your gaze
Slowly draw in you
Your heart now ablaze
Warm arms envelope
Your trembling form
Kiss and caress
Eyes filled with a storm
Too late you realise
Fangs pierce your skin
Im thirsting so deep
For the meal of sin
Your blood is the life now
Flows through my veins
You sink to the ground
As the sky breaks with rain
Author notes
A Vampire for Werewolf Avarus
Blueberry
A contest entry
- A Caress of Darkness by Werewolf Avarus.
300 points, ended June 4, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So... what do you think?
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WOW!!!!
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!
You filled the poem with so much details.
I love how it was about a vampire.
Good Luck in the contest!
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Thank you. Not my best, but glad people seem to enjoy it
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NICE! I like this one alot. It is like it has it's own flow. Very enjoyable!
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this was a good poem. Except for a the opening stanza and one line "With silk stained like wine"
I am dark fantasy
Try to ignore
A beauty and terror
A friend but a whore
The third and fourth lines of this stanza are in sync. But they arent in sync with the second.
As for the line :With silk stained like wine
It doesn't make any sense to me -
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With that line "Silk stained like win" I mean it to be a bloodred dress, but was half asleep when I wrote it- needless to say, late nights and great peotry dont always mix! Thanks for the comment though
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This is awesome. You really paint a vivid picture.
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Thank you for the entry, it was an enjoyable read that flowed really well. And yes, it is okay!!
Good Luck!!
'Wolf
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this was really goodLoved it!
OG
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Not my greatest masterpiece, but I hope its okay...
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