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translation:
Pills & alcohol won't help you sleep
they won't help you feel good; or
mend a broken heart... praying for love.

hahaha yes I know the translation is not a haiku is it still ok though?

A contest entry

just for fun not ment to be taken seriously

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  • Mari Goes gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    Ah, I commented here as CB, my other side of the ocean account...
    This one still makes me laugh. One of the good things in this contest is that we can laugh even though broken heart is part of the...poem...? haiku...? entry


  • Canto-Brasileiro
    May 20, 2008

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    Pills and alcohol can only make one start to bang heads on the wall
    I liked how you used the emoticons, very clever and fun!

    Mari


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    LMAO!!! I've seen another of these... it's soooo weird and funny and cute!!!!

    I love it!!!! hehehe


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    May 19, 2008

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    love it you have created a great job with this translation and one with so much true meaning well done Brian.


    • background music
      May 19, 2008
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      oh you should read some of the others this is a hillarious contest... or perhaps I'm just


  • catz Moderators member
    May 18, 2008

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    Ahhh... a good emotiku with a message Very well done and I wish you good luck in the contest

    Dee


  • jcat gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    This was AWESOME!!!!! I love it and am so jealous that I am not quick enough to come up with something so brilliant as this!!!! Love it love it love it!!! Gave me a huge smile which is just what I needed at the moment since the 2 yr old and the 3 yr old are driving me to the drinking point!!!! Best of luck but how could this be beat??


    • background music
      May 19, 2008
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      I'm pleased this gave you a laugh! and it was easy! try it - I dare you thanks for the lovely comment too


  • Dienush
    May 18, 2008
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    This sounds like fun


  • Sir Ima Cucumber
    May 18, 2008

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    It may not be a haiku but it is an emotiku and that is what I wanted!

    And more important, it makes sense, and that title is very cool, I have to figure out how to do that.

    This contest has been fun and I'm pleased how everyone has entered into it with lighthearted humor. And yours has something no other has so far, it has a moral, you gets extra judging points for that.

    Thanks for entering.

    Trojan Duck/Yemassee


  • lively banter
    May 18, 2008

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    dam that is insane! after reading the translation and looking back at the emoitcons, i can totally get it. this could be like a new form of art in all poetry


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    May 18, 2008

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    Heh' not seen the fiddle player before.
    How did you create the top title part? I like it. Sol


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    May 18, 2008

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    LOL! Very clever, I love how you
    put this one together! I hope that
    you do well with this piece. Great
    work here and good luck to you!




    Jeremy0826


  • Lucy.
    May 18, 2008

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    Okey dokey then!
    Well, I have been wanting to attempt more haiku myself so....yes, I think I'll give this a shot! Thanks so much for bringing this contest to my attention!

    LOL, and on the poem itself. Fantastic write, absolutely superb imagery, SUPERB!!! Yes, I think this is your best yet.


  • Lotus-Mama
    May 18, 2008

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    I think ours go down the same path. two peas in a pod LOL This is great!!

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