You are...
The yellow topaz of the eyes of my tiger
The first footprint on the face of my moon
The gold discovered at the end of my rainbow
The well-worn clichés of my love song
The fastest download to crash my desktop
The shuffled playlist of my I-pod
The most used letters in any alphabet
The teaspoon of sugar stirred in my coffee
The frosted topping of moist carrot cake
The spicy filling inside my sandwich
The flag erected on the summit of Everest
The smooth caress of a morning sun
The hot sticky sauce over melting ice cream
The stroke of vintage slipping down my throat
The sweetness of donuts glistening on my lips.
But what you are and always will be
is nothing less than you.
Author notes
just wanted to say what someone means to me - option 6 I think....
A contest entry
- It's All About Love by Angelic Princess21.
700 points, ended May 22, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A great write, I found this to be very up lifting
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I found this to be very creative in it's descriptiveness. It's not always easy to describe emotions the way you have here....wonderful piece.
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Oh this was so very beautiful.
Loved your imagery & descriptions!
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wow that is love poetry's creative side, fo sho! i like this. it has really deep thought and meaning. this is awesome! there's practically a beautiful metaphor in every line! i think this is one of my favorite poems ever, and that's saying something, because i tend to adore a lot of peoems! =D you'll see yourself on my favorite's list! sweet poem!
- peanut butter fudge
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I love it!
You've done a great job expressing how you feel and i can really see that.
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oooo....this is really sweet!!!! i love everything about this poem!...
keep writing
keep smeiling
keep the peace
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Exquisite. Nothing short of that. I love it. If only we could all find a person that could make us feel this way. Great job. Thank you for entering, and good luck!
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this is great good luck!
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Aww this is so cute and sweet!
Aww this is so cute and sweet! The sentiments are fun and lovely and they flow right into the heart of the reader and enchant. Beautiful sentiments and well used graphic poetic artistry and sculpting. You really know how to pen an masterpiece, this is fabulous and such a joy and fun read.
Well done, love it, its beatiful! Now I am hungry though and I am supposed to be in a diet! (Lol!).
Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
Kaz.
Kazytc XX
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THAT IS SWEET AND I JUST LOVE IT!!!!
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its sweet...and i like the line about cliches....keep writing
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Very sweet, powerful entry. Great imagery and feeling throughout. Previous poster had it right, the last five lines are great stuff.
Congratz on your trophy!
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wow!!! i absolutely love the metaphors!! this is my kind of writing...it shows such talent!!
The hot sticky sauce over melting ice cream
The stroke of vintage slipping down my throat
The sweetness of donuts glistening on my lips.
But what you are and always will be
is nothing less than you.
this has to be my favourite part!!!
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Beautiful poem to say at least. I love the descriptive metaphors incorporated, the various lines with different tone after each and the final line is just beautiful, representing true love and acceptance and acknowledgement of that one significant person the composition is subjected to, a lovely dedication. Congratulations on the bronze trophie.
~Emily~ xx
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Great use of metaphores! I like that, however if you're looking for a little advice, it would be top notch by making it rhyme. Good luck in the contest!
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this is a love poem for your special someone, thank you for this entry, good luck
Lin
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wow this is very powerful yet down to earth and up to date a very much like it's personail on many levels^^
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nice
I enjoyed reading this metaphoric list poems. Most of the images you have chosen to represent your relationship are poetic, evocative and sensual. These are my favourite ones:
The first footprint on the face of my moon
The flag erected on the summit of Everest
The frosted topping of moist carrot cake
The ending is a little bit too cute and "wrapped up" for my liking, but perhaps you have tailored it for this contest.
Best wishes in the contest,
myron.
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Wow..
This one is so touching..
I expected it to be cliche, but. I really enjoyed it.
It kept noticing my self smiling,
these are actually things I'd like to here.
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This is the sort of poem that every single girl in the world would die to have written about her from some one she loves; your muse is very, very lucky. It was cute but not cutesy, repetitive but not boring, and sweet but not corny. It's a beautiful piece, and was very enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing this with us; it was beautifully written, and is a very sweet topic. Best of luck in your contests ^_^
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cute!
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excellent
The spicy filling inside my sandwich
The flag erected on the summit of Everest
The smooth caress of a morning sun
The hot sticky sauce over melting ice cream
The stroke of vintage slipping down my throat
wellw ritten.Its a well crafted poem.The meter and rhyme was just about okay.I loved the overall package. Thanks for sharing.Please visit my poetry as well.
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I am... an indefinite article.
"erected"
This word never ever ceased to make me chuckle.
"But what you are and always will be
is nothing less than you."
o.o? Yeah, this statement is established in circular logic, which totally perplexes me. arrange the words in a circle without you at the end and but at the beginning and you will NEVER stop reading. lol
But I liked the poem, and I lurv carrot cake.
"the shuffled playlist of my ipod"
This is so random, you must only have music you LOVE for this to apply. You're silly.
but i know what you're trying to say.....
so <3
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You brought a smile on my face while you imaged the picture of your target so beautifully..pure poetic verson of the humanbeing..well done..
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Awww this is amazing ! Loved this and all the comparing and, well, just everything. I needed to read something like this, something that made me smile. Bah, I've been having the most boring/horrible day. Anyways ! I absolutely loved how you ended this with:
But what you are and always will be
is nothing less than you.
Astonishing & beautiful :] Thanks for entering & best of luck to youu! ♥
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Anything worth saying once is worth repeating...
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Very sweet. The repetition was actually tasteful, not boring. So nice job.
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I loved the repetition.
But it confused me a little,
but all in all it was fantastic.
Thanks for the entry.
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Normally repatition becomes old and cliche in poems like this, but managed to avoid that very well. Great poem
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i like this, the metaphores are a nice realtion to love best of luck to u in the contest
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This is so very sweet. I love the way you describe your someone in ways that are special to you. It's wonderful. Thank you.
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Good write here
This spoke in volume and so true for we each are so unique and in being unique we are all perfect in our own way .
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Beautiful imagery and sentiment. Congrats on the bronze.
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This is wonderful while making your point so strongly with so much depth and the wonderful immagery as well..well done my friend....
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A very careful set of relevant cliches that actually produce some meaning - great job.
You might want to re-read the description to the end.
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beautiful
You can very well tell by this write that this person means the world to you. This is very beautiful. I want to thank you for entering my contest. You have wowed me with your tender words. Best of luck in my contest.
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