waterfalls nibble at rocks,
unmoved sentinels,
refreshed by the surf.
bitter cold ankles,
chased and slapped
to icy scarlet.
children's carefree laughter,
scampering out of grasp,
implores us to embrace life daily
good and bad.
Author notes
Picture Promt Provided By:
TheSilverQuill
35 Words
A contest entry
- Beautiful Peace by Twisted Temptress.
600 points, ended June 2, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh what a pretty picture! Yours words sent me splashing back to those good ol' carefree days when happiness was water hole and rope swing away. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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--claps-- all so true, and so well put! Fantastic work! Best of luck to you
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The flow and rhythm of this piece go so well with what you have say that the entire poem just seems to mesh well. Love those tranquil moments that we don't get to have near enough of. Even the title seems quite fitting for this. Nice job! Best of luck to ya.
~Midnight Lace
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What a great piece to sink one's mind into. This shrouds me in sweet tranquilty. Those who contemplate the beauty of the earth find reserves of strength that will endure as long as life lasts. Outstanding poetry! Best of luck to you in the contest.
JLG
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This made me desire to be cradled within the pages of your words. The imagery was so tranquil and serene and the beauty that fills my mind makes it difficult to leave the page. Good luck in the contest. I can almost smell the cool, refreshing air as I stand near the waterfall of your words.
TxCowgirl
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What beautiful imagery you have used! Your words certainly dance across the page painting many different images in my mind, such a rare ability in so few words!
You certainly have categorised this perfectly! It is truly inspirational!
All the best with this.
Gaylene
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You went straight for the juggerly with this piece. I like how you went into the promptlol
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A nice slice of life. Showing that the plesure is in the living! Beautifully done! Best of luck my friend!
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This is so serenely moving. wow.
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I like this...reminds me of one I wrote several years ago. Love the line about children's laughter scampering out of grasp...refreshing ending in light of the endless, morbid death poetry I have found on this site.
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clean and refreshing both verse and prompt picture
you did a lovely description
Tamara
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