Glass enfolds my palms with a mist,
the water of life runs on the other side,
it waits to be trapped inside my small fist,
the colors of springtime, tame and wild...
happy I am, as happy as a child.
I watch my face, combing my hair,
the rain keeps falling on the window pane,
my fingers leave traces shaped like a sun's flare,
poetry on the glass, a true love's refrain...
rare words, arcane.
White petal boats summon summer,
blackbirds compose a new merry song,
my chest hides a wild working drummer,
to love and be loved makes me so strong...
to you I belong.
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A contest entry
- Prime. Rhyme . Time (Must vote contest) by Legend.
2000 points, ended May 25, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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We all belong to someone..and you have intended this thought by the inventive poetry my friend..a great immagery with a great impact as we3ll..well done...
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A beautifully written poem with wonderful imagery and language.
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Small fist grasps Sringtime's refrain,
it's print a star on windowpane
gathers rhythms to a misty drummer
cants to the heart of love and summer!
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Hey Sonja.. guess am reading ur work after a loong time.. How nice this is !! Soo soothing and yes.. enchanting in its own way.. spare the image a little scary though
wonderful poem dear.. good luck in the contest
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Lovely rhyme scheme- I love the rain, and love poems with rain in them! Wonderful writing, with such subtle rhyme, Sonja.
- Namita
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Great write..beautiful rhyme scheme!
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What a lovely write. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, your rhyme and flow are marvelous!!!
Thanks for sharing,
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wow this was a deep write that hand print was like the killer of this whole poetry piece her it was a pleasure good luck
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This is another that has wonderfully unstructured rhyme and to me the imagery just shines!!! A well done, and perfect imperfection [non-traditional form]...
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Such beautiful and tender words, imagery is simply stunning and leaves the reader pondering in deep thought. Well done and good luck in the contest with this very charming entry.
Shaz xx :
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Absolutely beautiful Sonja!
Beautiful imagery taking the reader from the delights of a child's eye to the heart of a woman.
Superb!
~Von
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Sonja - your imagery in this is so beautiful. The rhyme is interesting & engaging...every stanza You write love like how I want to be in love
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"poetry on the glass, a true love's refrain..."
This is indeed love's refrain you've written here, accompanied by the rhythm of rain. Beautifully expressed and so fluid... it murmurs like water. Always a pleasure to read your expressions of love.
~ Nicolette
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I love the rhyme pattern you have used here, the singular lines add to the over all beauty of the piece and follow the rhyme well.All in all an excellent piece that gave pleasure to this reader. Good luck in the contest Thank you for entering
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A beautiful write. Heartfelt. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Well penned. Best wishes in the contest. Take care.
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Outstanding
This poem combines rich imagery with fluid rhyme. I liked the lines you added inbetween the stanzas which give the poem fresh meaning and direction. This poem speaks of romance and I liked how you developed the theme using the rain to reflect your emotions. Best of luck in the contest.
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