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Song of Harmony

in granite and faith rises harmonious song,

transcending basic philosophy;

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"The Tower of Dreams"

A contest entry

any critique is very welcome [as long as it is done with courtesy and constructive to my learning. I thank you.

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  • myagirl silver member
    August 8
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    wow! words after your's seem redundant. Beautiful.

  • Desire gold member
    July 2

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    Oh My Word~

    Oh Precious You sure brought forth Brevity with Power
    Gorgeous piece You have penned and what images You evoked from this Tower of Dreams~
    Miss You Beautiful~ and Thank You for stopping
    byyyyyyy~ Yay

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~

  • excellent~

    You summed all this up wonderful in just 2 lines sis
    Congrats on the gold tropy as well...
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • yumanbeing gold member
    May 27

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    I know you have a complex relationship with traditional religion,
    I enjoyed the last line - it is varied and subtle -
    Short form can be difficult to write and understand -
    I had to read it a few times
    great write to savor

  • notorious silver member
    May 19

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    "in granite and faith" These 2 things seem so unrelated, but you make them intertwine in this line like they do. Very unique.

    "transcending"
    I love this word--it has a mystical quality about it and gives your entire poem a mystical flow.

    Gorgeous, peaceful visuals here...

  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 18

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    Intriguing, brings forth many thoughts, in many differing aspects, at once.

    Concealment of stoned blessings-
    Rivalry for hearts of all mankind-
    Endowing thoughts other than baser instincts-



    JD

  • i love the aura of hope when i am around iconic religious buildings , little said but very powerful , good luck xx peter

  • nicely done. all the best in this contest. have great day.

  • A rather ignoble take on material philosophy, given you are insinuating the merits of metaphysical claims.
  • Very philosophical dear friend and so very true. Love, C

  • Just beautiful and a philosophy in itself!
    A very deep piece and so thought provoking.
    All the very best with this
    Gaylene

    . Rewarded 4


  • Hekate gold member
    May 18

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    Hello,
    Just like you I am still learning. I'm not really sure what granite means
    Other then that I found the ending to be very unique.
    Well done in 10 Words.

    Kari

    • granite is a type of almost indestructable stone [very strong]Thank you so much for taking the time to comment
      reenie
  • an interesting take on the prompt. Transcendence always being the aim of the spirit.

  • Neat,

    haunting and creepy but at the same time beautifull, i wish you luck in the contest.

    Great work.

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