in granite and faith rises harmonious song,
transcending basic philosophy;
Author notes
picture credit
http://deteanus81.deviantart.com/art4032692
"The Tower of Dreams"
A contest entry
- 7 entries, 10 words #3 by notorious.
450 points, ended May 19, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
any critique is very welcome [as long as it is done with courtesy and constructive to my learning. I thank you.
Comments
1 - 15 of 15
-
wow! words after your's seem redundant. Beautiful.
-
Oh My Word~
Oh Precious You sure brought forth Brevity with Power
Gorgeous piece You have penned and what images You evoked from this Tower of Dreams~
Miss You Beautiful~ and Thank You for stopping
byyyyyyy~ Yay
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
-
excellent~
You summed all this up wonderful in just 2 lines sis
Congrats on the gold tropy as well...
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
-
I know you have a complex relationship with traditional religion,
I enjoyed the last line - it is varied and subtle -
Short form can be difficult to write and understand -
I had to read it a few times
great write to savor -
"in granite and faith" These 2 things seem so unrelated, but you make them intertwine in this line like they do. Very unique.
"transcending"
I love this word--it has a mystical quality about it and gives your entire poem a mystical flow.
Gorgeous, peaceful visuals here... -
Intriguing, brings forth many thoughts, in many differing aspects, at once.
Concealment of stoned blessings-
Rivalry for hearts of all mankind-
Endowing thoughts other than baser instincts-
JD
-
i love the aura of hope when i am around iconic religious buildings , little said but very powerful , good luck xx peter
-
nicely done. all the best in this contest. have great day.
-
A rather ignoble take on material philosophy, given you are insinuating the merits of metaphysical claims.
-
Very philosophical dear friend and so very true. Love, C
-
Just beautiful and a philosophy in itself!
A very deep piece and so thought provoking.
All the very best with this
Gaylene
. Rewarded 4
-
Hello,
Just like you I am still learning. I'm not really sure what granite means
Other then that I found the ending to be very unique.
Well done in 10 Words.
Kari
-
-
granite is a type of almost indestructable stone [very strong]Thank you so much for taking the time to comment
reenie
-
-
an interesting take on the prompt. Transcendence always being the aim of the spirit.
-
Neat,
haunting and creepy but at the same time beautifull, i wish you luck in the contest.
Great work.
Adding your comment:
1 - 15 of 15
