Hollowed screams
Echoing
Through my soul.
Cruel torments
Displayed
Before my eyes.
Heartless words
Only
Pacify the weak.
Tripping out
Happy
One more day.
Another heaven
Awakened
Until night vanishes.
Hollowed screams
Bleeding
Red and unstoppable.
Cruel torments
Entice
The decaying morality.
Heartless words
Fill
Wounds with lies.
Tripping out
Ecstatic
One last time.
Another heaven
Forever
One final night.
Author notes
Ok then, feeling totally down. This just made me feel a little better. Don't know why i wrote it in this style, but i did.
Please tell me what you think
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Nicely written!
The word play, the layout...everything was great with this piece
Bravo Claire-Anne!
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Great poem
Remember, the snapping thing goes both ways if you ever need -
This is fantastic. I really like this poem and it is so well writen! Good job!
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this is really sad beautiful
are you ok ??
i love this & you
always know that sis -
DARLING
Is this what you got from what we were talking about last night, when you couldn't write? Cuz is fo, shit! I can't do anything this good when I'm just tryna get anything or everything down. Yeah, that makes sense.
But you know, this style works. And the pattern makes me happy, I dunno why.
"Hollowed screams
Bleeding
Red and unstoppable." -- I love that. Especially "Hollowed screams". Totally ace doll face.
And "Another heaven
Awakened
Until night vanishes." makes me think. Night is heaven, dark alone and cold, comes to mind. It's like the opposite of the typical heaven, and that's why it works I think.
I LOVE YOU.
& I love this.
♥
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