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Celestial Assitance

As my soul becomes weary from battle
I descend further into the unknown
facing these demons alone


Fear of defeat weighs heavy
screaming aloud
releasing negative energy
I beg for mercy


Breathing deep
I regain strength


The fight finally
ends


Then I see
You were here all along
Guiding me

 

Author notes

Prompt - Picture Above - 50 Words
Pic Credit -
http://designingdivas.deviantart.com/art/Pray-For-Us-Sinners-by-bp-girl-78824447

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  • DrkPoet silver member
    May 22, 2008

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    Beautifully done and well deserving on the gold, congrats on that. Your imagination just seemed to flow right across the page with your thoughts from the prompt.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 22, 2008

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    Congrat's on the gold


  • jcat gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    I love this!!! It is a gentle reminder that even when we think we are alone....we are NOT!! Your word choice was beautiful and filled me with positive energy!! Thank you so much for entering my contest


  • aboomer silver member
    May 19, 2008

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    LOVE your title!! Goes great with that picture, too.
    Great wording - I think in line 13 you want the word "were"...and I love that ending on this,
    'Then I see
    You where ("were") here all along
    Guiding me'
    best wishes in your contest.

  • thegoldenpath
    May 18, 2008
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    Its always good to know something has our back


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    Sometimes that's the case.. we think we are fighting battles on our own and yet there is a guiding hand or light just near by!

    Such depth in this.. I love it!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    Some divine assistance works wonders. hehe

    Nicely penned.


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    May 18, 2008

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    it has hope... starts out sad then moves to hope i like... great job here.... goood luck in contest.......


  • maralisa silver member
    May 18, 2008

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    SmileAs my soul becomes weary from battle
    I descend further into the unknown
    facing these demons alone
    Breathing deep
    I regain strength

    The fight finally
    ends
    Then I see
    You where here all along
    Guiding me
    This is just so wonderful good luck in the contest beautiful picture

  • Sunshine Princess
    May 18, 2008

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    I do not know you but I think your poem is good we all need some help at times and guides of life will help you if you let them I like your poem have a nice day

  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 18, 2008
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    what a take on the picture ..so desperate then so uplifting, the reminder..Love this.

    hope you do well


    Cindy

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