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Hell's Bride

I want to kill though I know its wrong
My heart feels frozen
I'm falling to pieces while standing strong

No emotions to tell me what is right
Cold and uncaring
My soul lost this fight

I'm Hell's dark bride
But this isn't what I want
I want the part of me that died

So I'm taking my life to get it back
Ending this torture
I push in the knife and my body goes slack

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  • Nam
    June 8

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    "I want to kill though I know its wrong" - "its" would be "it's" as in "it is wrong".

    It was hard to read this because of the black text, I would suggest lightening that up a bit.

    -Nam

  • Sols
    May 31

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    Even though this may send some a chill I liked it. I can feel the pain of a person wishing to commit sucide. Thank you for enetering and I wish you the best.

  • whispernthedark silver member
    May 21

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    This is a great interpretation of the picture. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper

  • Cerulean gold member
    May 20
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    This was yummy.


    hehe


  • Nephlim
    May 19

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    I really liked the latter half of the poem, especially the 'taking my life to get it back' part. Sometimes that seems like the only option, and it makes perfect sense, right? You really portrayed some strong emotions here
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


  • Rose of Ireland gold member
    May 18
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    Awesome work.

    (but the black font is difficult to read on this dark background).


  • Titus gold member
    May 18

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    Insightfully brilliant!

    There is much strength in spite of the vulnerability of waver. The thing is, you are to read this as a fear and nothing else, when all around you are doing as this does, you'll find you are the only one standing, and feeling quite strong after all. Insightfully brilliant!

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