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Forevermore



In remembrance of stolen gold,
A dragon's tear,
          glitters forever.



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Soz for taking so long

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  • notorious
    May 18, 2008

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    Ahaha, no problem for taking a while--doesn't every poet need time to craft the right words?

    A very dragon-ish background color chosen here...complements the context very well.

    I love all 3 lines--really and truly!!

    "In remembrance" is always a great phrase and it works so nicely here--it has a kind of 'Long, long ago'-feel about it that I like.

    "stolen gold"
    Another awesome phrase.

    "A dragon's tear glitters forever"
    Beautiful.

    Suggestions:

    Anyways, 'forevermore' is one word...please fix the title.

    "A dragon's tear
    glitters forever."
    You don't really need the capitalization in 'glitters' or the comma after 'tear'.

    Please fix these 2 things and let me know when you do. =]