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Myth's Existence

Prisoned
Prisms  
Tears
Falling
Crying
Igniting
Freedom
Hope

Imagination

Dreams

 

 



 

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ART ARTISSIMA.DEVIANTART.ART Dragons tear

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  • notorious gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    "Prisoned Prisms"
    Great alliteration here.

    Suggestions:

    Your title should be A Myth's Existence (with an apostrophe between the 'h' and 's' in myth!)

    The 'A' should probably be capitalized as well to match the other letters.

    Some commas could have been incorporated between the verbs, but some poets don't like to use punctuation, which I get.

    Thanks for entering!


    • tainfinite
      May 18, 2008
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      taiinfinite

      Cheers for that i was still editing, havnt really got the hang of this electronic slate yet,and the options this site has lol thanks for running the contest and your help