The water follows her song
high above the lyrics
that we can never learn
exposed to the light
and warmth of amethyst skies
that can only change
when she reaches the shore
and the fringe of her existence
will rest
before she falls into another dawn ~
dancing somewhere
in July...
Author notes
Prompt ~ Waterfalls
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Stunning absolutely stunning
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Stunning imagery!!! Using the water as a metaphor.. wow.. this really is an outstanding write!! But then all your writes are just so gorgeous!!
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Waterfalls given character...amazing again!!!
You turn waterfalls into something beyond the deepness of metaphors...You give speechless things a voice, a character--it's amazing. (I think I overuse that word in describing your poetry).
"high above the lyrics
that we can never learn"
OH MY GOD!!
If I'd written a line like that, I'd be so smug with self-satisfaction that it would be disgusting to witness it.
The rest of it is amazing as well, but those 2 lines really stuck with me...truly well-thought out (or maybe it was effortless?)
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