Coyness carries her demeanor
down shielded pathways of desire
Secure in passion's promise she
covers sensual skin perfumed by
love's ardor
A farewell only briefly given as
her lover sails on waters of wonder,
only to return upon wanton seas
Author notes
Prompt: Pic, 15-40 words (40)
CREDIT THE PICTURES OWNER-----Dreams_Of_Reality_by_Otravituss.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie.................. by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
650 points, ended May 18, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Sad and sensual
Beautiful write about lovers parting
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The reader is left breathless for more. The points fits the target mood. Clear, defined and moving. The picture and poem compliment each other, but, stand on their own. Silver trophy well deserved.
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Congrats on the silver!
Another silver! Yippee
A lovely piece hunni, great take on the pic, which is awesome! Congrats on the trophy 
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you were robbed again....
So should have been gold...Cindy wake up!
lol
Si
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nice write. I love the imagery in it. Congrats on the silver.
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This is beautiful dear...such lovely imagyer...
congrats on the silver !!!!
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A beautiful write hun! Lovely imagery! Congrats on the Silver
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Superb
Perfect way to draw in the most interest from your reader. Such desire of emotion. Congrats on the silver. Love the sailor part. I was in the Navy. Don
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Beautiful. Lovely take on the prompt and an easy-to-read flow. Well done on the silver.
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Yes, good write.
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Your poetry always leaves me speachless. How do you write this well?!?!?!?!? Anyways, wonderful poem, great feelings and beautiful imagery. Great write and congrats on the silver!
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Good job.
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This one flowed with ease
as the love on the seas
Beautifully expressed and outstanding word choices. grats on another shiny guy!
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very descriptive
and passionate! I'd hurry back too if I was that sailor! l.o.l. congrats on the silver!
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Smiling
You have such a way of saying love is grand
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Congrats on the shiny sis xxxxx
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Didnt know you were in this contest tooo...at least i dont think i knew haha!!
Excellent take on the prompt, much depth and beauty to it...love it sis x
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This read so well, great rhythm
I loved where you took this and I jus lov'd every word hehe
Thank you
Good luck SiS
Cin
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Simply beautiful, and so well matched to the pic! You have a lovely way of bringing words together that sound musical, and yet never lose your focus on the message. Well done!
s
~J.
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AHHH your vocabulary is perfection--you utilize unique words and phrases...e.g. 'coyness', 'shielded pathways of desire' (what a classy way of saying 'lust' =P), 'ardor' 'wanton'
Loved the first stanza best out of the three, but the whole thing was uber good (duh!)
"yet to return upon wanton seas"
I think 'yet' should be 'only'...I think it sounds better, but that may just be me.
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I absolutely agree!! I was struggling with the 'yet' thinking it wasn't right.. thank you so much for the suggestion, I will use that!
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Thanks for all the support too!
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well done....... good luck in contest.... i love your work you always amaze me..... thanks for sharing
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"Coyness carries her demeanor
down shielded pathways of desire"
this is darkly sensual in a really good way...
best of luck in the contest
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Wow sis you did a great job.. I love this!!
I'm at a loss for words... Great job!
Best of luck..
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Wonderfully penned and an enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp
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Wanton seas -
Oh passion's promise is one of those phrases I have stopped myself from using before. It's a great phrase. But it's also someone's user name on this site. lol
They might think it's about them or something.
*rambles on about something else or another*
Best of luck in the contest.
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hehehe I know!! That's why I've not used it before but meh, too bad lol
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