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Shadows


Shadows across your eyes
scream in the night,
shiver in existence
expelled by the light

In this world of love
you are a mannequin of time,
to sooth the weary souls
that have lost all rhyme.






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  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 18, 2008

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    Awww, this is a touching take on the prompt

    I felt soothed reading it, thank you so much

    Good luck


    Cindy


  • catz Moderators member
    May 18, 2008

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    Very nice, Karl I especially like the first stanza.
    I wish you best of luck in the contest with this supurb piece.

    (Cannonsfire is right about the spelling of mannequin)

    Dee


  • Angelflower
    May 18, 2008

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    Wow.. you did a wonderful job..
    The imagery is just amazing..
    I really like this ..
    Great write! best of luck..

    Angel


  • Cannonsfire
    May 17, 2008

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    You certainly haven't lost rhyme but I do think it's mannequin Love, C

  • OurxBeginning
    May 17, 2008

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    Hahaha. This is a cute piece. I love dolphins, and think they're very pretty animals. Cute write, good luck.

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