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Josie

So many times I had tried and I had failed
To find someone who lifts me up.
In all of their hearts it seemed judgement prevailed

They disliked those who didn't do exactly what's "in"
Tearing me down
They where always stretching me thin.

But the moment I saw her I knew she wasn't the same.
She showed me true kindness,
And she didn't play the popularity game

She smiled at me when everyone else looked away.
She always accepted me,
No matter the things the others would say.

So when I heard she told him no
And he beat her to death.
My heart was shattered, I missed her so.

But when the group of girls walked up to me,
They told me it would be okay.
I was so surprised, I was an outcast. Couldn't they see?

Her kindness had broken down their wall.
They stopped playing games,
And realized we were people over all.

I just wish she was here, I wish she could see.
I wish Josie could know
The effect she had, and what she did for me.

Author notes

Thank you, Maa!
Yes, this is true.

I think this relates to the the need motivation contest because Josie was my inspiration. She was the reason I got up every morning and she helped me survive a very difficult time.

CJ Poet Laureate
I VOTED: Dane Cook

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  • ThisIsMyWonderland
    June 22
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    Very insperational. The rhyming was awkward and forced in a few places, but your heart is in the right place. Sad though, but I can find the light in it. Good job. 6/10

  • Nam
    June 8
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    "They where always stretching me thin." - "where" would be "were".

    This sort of reminded me of Rudolph the Red-Nosed reindeer story. Similarities abound.

    -Nam

  • fallinxalone
    May 21

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    ooh!! this made me tingle!!goosebumps!the whole deal! how wonderful!! i just don't know how to express how much i adored this. fabulous write. loved the rhythm of it. thank you for entering!

  • RedAquarius
    May 20

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    It's a tragic loss that someone who can light the way for others is taken from us. I'm sorry for the loss of your friend, she lives on in the lesson you and others learned. Good poem.
  • JWGoethe
    May 19
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    Sad and brutal. Great write, very tragic.

  • tehzeeb
    May 19

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    wow.. I can really relate to what you are saying, something happend like that to me, but actually 7 special friends of mine helped me out...not 2 mention AP did 2!

  • HeartbreakHeroine-x
    May 18

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    This is a beautiful poem... and thanks for the explanation in the author's note; yes, people who you are close to *can* definitely help you get through hard times of all sorts...

    "Her kindness had broken down their wall.
    They stopped playing games,
    And realized we were people over all."

    thank you for your entry,

    ~QoA

  • OrangeMarmalade silver member
    May 17

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    Wow!

    That is a wonderful piece of poetry, though so tragic! Thank you for entering! Best of luck in the contest!


  • maa gold member
    May 17

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    oh my god, what a heartwrenching poem ...
    is this is a true story ? I want to cry now ...
    I can personally relate to each one of the characters in your verse, the outsider who has finally been integrated, the girl who swam against the current and preferred kindness over fashionable behaviour, and also those who were stuck in their judgment and have been transformed by the touch of kindness ...

    you have truly surprised me here with your poem, I had not expected to read anything so powerful just before the contest closes ...

    heartfelt blessings,
    maa

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