Rotting teeth and only flesh hanging,
From bones so brittle.
Rib cage protruding from the skin,
Connotes the prison bars,
Of beauty locked away.
Eyelids heavy and stomach sore,
From 4 weeks of eating and purging.
Barely a whole person under baggy clothes.
Barely a woman with a barren body,
And a flat, shapeless figure.
Who made her this way?
Killing herself slowly,
For the cost of thin.
What is the point of it?
So the coffin will be smaller?
Years of being mocked for weight issues,
Finally blown to her head.
The years of abuse from girls,
Twice the size of her frail body,
Finally sunk into her head.
A world ruled by BMI's and scales,
Seems hardly a world at all.
Loss of hair, rotting teeth,
Barren body and only bones,
doesn't seem like beaty to me.
Author notes
Well this is what happened to my sister, because of people in the world who have this need to pick on people's flaws, my sister can't eat. She tries to eat but now her anorexia is so bad her body won't take in any food. I believe people are the reason for so many mental disorders in this world which is the reason why I hate them so much.
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This poem is brilliant. The emotion is written very well, and no-one can deny the truth in the words. I can tell you pent a lot of time on this poem, and it is abolutely stunning. Congratz on the glod trophy. You deserved it. Awesome job!
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"Who made her this way?
Killing herself slowly,
For the cost of thin.
What is the point of it?
So the coffin will be smaller?"
this is really sad poem and realistic.
great job
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Quiet interesting. The imagery gives a view into her lifestyle and what she actually would look like.
Very good descriptive language, it helped push the point of the poem forward. Thank you for entering and good luck. Also if you would like to give your opinion as to what causes eating disorders feel free to send me an email or a message through here. -
Send her to me. She'll gain at least 2 Kg a month.
My problem is the total opposite.
Seriously, take her out of that environment.
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Unfortunately its quite true, and I witnessed an attempted meal.
Again, like many other poems, its hard for me to empathize, but I found this one easy.
This really made me think, and Im sure anyone reading it would feel the same.
"Rib cage protruding from the skin,
Connotes the prison bars,
Of beauty locked away."
Wonderful Full Stop
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Wow Ashy this is an extremely powerful piece of work and I feel it's one of the best poems you have written. So much meaning and anger in the words. I never knew this about your sister. I want to say bravo and applaude you but it's sick that this really is the case, that this is happening in our society. I want to say this are my favourite lines:
From bones so brittle.
Rib cage protruding from the skin,
Connotes the prison bars,
Of beauty locked away.
But instead i'll say these are the words that got to me the most. Well done.
-Swintha
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