nakedness paralleled linear,
slipped shadow of time's construct;
presents face clockwork.
never archaic is advance,
of steady streams beyond chance.
Author notes
http://budgie.deviantart.com/art/13oclock-85890774
A contest entry
- 10/20/20 Quickie... let's go people!! by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 17, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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yeah, don't ever let chances slip ... lol - hey, that's the message I saw in here okay?!
congrats on the silver
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Congratulations!!!
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Nice vocabulary executed here!
e.g. paralleled, linear (love this word!), archaic
Love the word 'clockwork' as well.
"Face clockwork" is one of the most innovative phrases I've seen in a multitude of lots of great phrases...
Good luck...and awesome poem!!
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You never cease to amaze me with your poetry!!
Awesome as always..
All my best to you in the contest
Jazzy
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Fab! Love the last two lines the best... Speaks to me of advancing in life... taking risks...
I need to do that!
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Are you sure that's just 20 words? (LOL) Wonderful take on the prompt...
Ken
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ha ha
you made me count.
Thanks
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way to go on pictured inspiration ... love the 2nd line the best.
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