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Naked

Do you know how hard it is to stand here?
Exposed
You looking at me?
I’m afraid,
Self conscious of all the flaws that make up me
I can’t let you in.
I put up my walls.
I tremble at your touch.
Why do you stay? I say.
But please never leave
Be brave, you say
It’s only skin.
But
Skin minus the k is sin

Author notes

tried something different... hope you like it

Its just so hard to let go sometimes. to be naked and wearing only youreslf is scary, and also a feat I've yet to conquer completely... thanks for reading

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  • AJ Morelli gold member
    June 1

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    i'm glad you tried something different and so glad you took the time to enter it here, thanks


    al

  • oneal
    May 25

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    a request

    so true.

    I have mentioned "it" as being naked as well. to expose one's self to another is a type of nudity. I would definitely love if you explored this topic more deeply in a following poem.

    If you do let me know

    Oneal

  • This was a good write, keep it up. Its something you'll get over in time.
  • Interesting piece. I liked the uniqueness of this. Not too sensual, but I really did love it. The ending is my fav.

  • KayJay46 gold member
    May 17

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    Oh My...

    What a terrific take on the prompt... The doubts and angst of being naked with your love...a totally different perspective...even touching on the morality of it... Wonderfully complete and fresh... Well done!
    Ken

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