Knowledge lives and dies so fast,
It spins and settles melting down,
Outside inside looking past,
Falling to the ground,
Dirt it tingles as it decays,
Wilting once full bloomed petals,
Leaves they float in saline salt,
Just inches underwater settled,
Sunlight burning waveform songs,
Tingling woe filled days,
Kind words whispered in a song,
In a different time and place,
Brave old soldiers grievous roar,
Faulted for past misdeeds,
Simple safety misplaced thoughts,
Lost my smile’s keys,
Close my eyes and cut my hands,
Clench my sad weak fists,
And at days end in waning thoughts,
Listen to the Winter’s blowing wisps….
Author notes
you ever have one of those days at work ?
Written December 22nd, 2003
What did you think
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Well written
I love your back ground. *smile*
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WOW! MR.! your very intricate and your description of dirt, petals and events there of are fabulous. love it
ash -
KINDA REMINDED ME OF ROBERT FROST, LIKED IT, THE FACT YOU COMBINE NATURE IMAGERY WITH FEELING, WELL DONE!!!
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I've added you to my favorites... This is just amazing. And I'd never have believed that a picture of a wilting flower could be so beautiful. Once you added the poem, it just brought life to the image. Great work. ~ Patti ~
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wow is all I can say about this poem. You Did a great job on it Joey, I felt this one when I read it keep them coming and don't stop. Your a great poet
here is a hand to you WAY TO GO
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yeppers, all the photos on my poems are mine
LOL, this was one of personal favorite backgrounds, I wrote this poem to retire it off my authors page awhile back so it wouldn't just disappear 
the Rhodedendron as well. this was the first place I started posting images, but I found the size constraints a bit too much so I went to DA, but it seems DA lacks the interaction this site has, so I use them hand in hand. I think you are the first from DA to actually find your way here, been quite a few vice versa, anywhos thank you for pointing out the redundant word, I will try and think something else up, if I am not too lazy LOL, I usually leave a lot of errors in my stuff here, I don't much look at this stuff in a competitive perfectionist sort of way over here, its more a form of social expression for me, hence you will probably find quite a few errors and such in my stuff, just stay away from my really old poems, most are really crappy LOL, kinda some sort of reminder as to where I have been and where I am going I suppose,
kindest regards,
joe -
Wonderul Descriptions
Lovely, lovely phot. Is this one of yours? This poem has a beautiful concept and great imagery. The only thing I question here is the use of the word "Tingling" twice. Otherwise, this is a very worthy poem. -
och joe
this made me sad. just that i think of myself in winter, gazeing over so emty spaces... and i feel so alone. no one reacing, and like the bloom, trapped under the water, wilting...
the cold whisps of wind do take what they will, robbing the place of beauty and youth, robbing us of our breath... 'till old and haggard, we stumble foot in snow passage, forggotenthe laughter of brook, forgotten the dance in the grass, and wi' it... memories of love and youth. aye... all forgotten... and so terribly alone....
arden -
it was forced, the one line some people liked
"lost my smiles keys"
and the rhyme and meter, for my own taste are too simple, was just how I was feeling that day, actually was in angst /sadness both of which are quite close to the same for me. when I get stuck at times, I like to spill whatever hyperbole comes out, that does make it "original", rather than resorting to the thesaurus for an infinite vocabulary, yet not my own simple words. I enjoy simplicity sometimes, it shows I am human and my knowledge, like anyones is certainly "finite" -
I am so glad this isn't as bad as the crow poem.
there's actually very little I can say is wrong with this.
but... the meter seems forced after the second stanza- more forced than the first two stanzas even. if your vocabulary is limited (as it seems to be) use a thesaurus.
the rhyme is a bit forced in the (mis)deeds - keys rhyme. very forced.
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that is very interesting. anyway i liked it. anything new with you/? lol
love always heather lilcuz -
A Must Read - Gorgeous!!!
Joey, this is absolutely OUTSTANDING! From beginning to end I was captivated by it's beauty and depth. I must have read this over six times, it's just brilliant in flow and concept, so much to perceive and delve into. Just splendid in it's perfection hun, truly! wow! -
love the line "Lost my smile’s keys"
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this is an amazing poem. i love the flow and structure of this poem. and considering im a person not that fussed on structure i give you high regards. well done with this and keep it up. you are very talented
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WOW!
I am in awe at this poem!!!!
I love it!!!!!!!
I want to read all your poems now - this one got me
hooked!
Ugh, but I have to get off now
I am putting you on my fav's list so I can read more
of your poems!!! This was great!!!!
*applause*
Always,
Little Poet14
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Great emotion here!
Yes, I've had many days like this. You seem to express it so beautifully. Hardships are the decomposing of a soul's last words. We simply make art out of our afflictions. Our emotions may suffer from the coldness of the world but still we bloom in months to come. It's about finding that nourishment and being completely rooted to what we believe. We may wilt but we never die. -
Very well done indeed – beautiful fall in the words (no pun intended) and although a more sombre tone, you have a lovely euphony in the words – which for me is the most important part of poetry. You also have a cogent theme so for me puts the whole poem in the ‘above average’ group. Good work – if you get a moment take a look at my ‘Decomposition’ it is in a very similar vein…
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The poem is very pretty and the background is awesome! Well done hun! Aimee
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dear sweet joe,
of corse i 'ave had one of thoes days, i canna think of anyone whom doesna. that photo up there made me cry, ye are always manageing that. in this poen, ye capture that barren wasteland, where all that is life and beauty seems trapped beneath a venear of grey solid death. and the sadness that comes wi' the cold, unfeeling.but i think that mayhap, all that is froxen may be rejuvinateing in a way, and even grey is a coloue joe, we must remember that. all my love to ye, and joe... ye still write amazeing. i will never chance my stance on that.
arden -
Deep, beautiful imagery. Has a nice flow. Go you!
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beautiful
nice, definitly nice. I like the smoothness and the imagery. Keep up the good work! -
Days like that at work how about days like that at home
Indeed this was an attention getter
Very descriptive imagery in this one as well
Do hope you are okay an things are better for you hun
Come by and see me I miss your comments
Got to lay down I am sick
Night sweetie
Loved this and your author page too
and loves
Susan~~~~~
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Echoing my sentiments of winter exactly, Joey hon...the regret in the chill in those who have gone before and in our present and what we are doing with it, will we all be held accountable for allowing it to happen, and what power have we at this point in fixing anything...I am sure, that knowing your heart, that you ask yourself that daily in your subconscious daily, as you possess a heart, unlike the majority of the fools around us.
rhiannon 11 -
soft as the petals dew
are the words longing for a day of sunshine...
peace unto to you dear Joe
Tamara -
excellent
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Your Imagery in this writing is brilliant!! love this stanzaSunlight burning waveform songs,
Tingling woe filled days,
Kind words whispered in a song,
In a different time and place, such comforting words.. well done!!! ~~wishintreeUK~~
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Your poem is dark and brilliant at the same time. Well done!
And the answer to your question is...Yes! -
This is absolutly beautiful and your imagery is awesome.I am a big fan of rhyming poems and you did it so well here.And the background you chose is awesome!
TD
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A passing day into nights dark bliss,
where cares may drift away
and seeds of joyous dreams take root
where blooming flowers play.
Dream my sweet and reminisce of lovely times to come,
they'll over~shadow bitter days
and be brighter than the sun. ~Laura
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's Sweet Joe
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i like this man its pretty cool i like your style thats all i have to say i cant really think of anything else i just clicked your name cause i have the same ya know just to see
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Aaaaaaaaaaw and wish days of happiness and smiles
~I can understand one of those days~YOU know when I have had one of those~I am sorry you had endured and whatever the situation I wish it to be better~YOU are such an inspiration and so appreciated~YOU have nothing but good to say about others and now we are here for you~Sending you ~ and many 
to brighten your day 
...Stay strong sweetie and so appreciate YOU~Big hugs and much love~Desire
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Ahhhh the seasonal poem...with a twist. I like it a lot it makes me happy. Here's the part where I copy and paste some lines that I like:
"Simple safety misplaced thoughts,
Lost my smile’s keys," I can relate to those wprds very well in stuff like yeah.
Ok well I'm waiting for your next poem.
Smae
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And all I wanna do, is to hold you and warm your cold limbs and your heart, too ... But that wonderful heart of yours is never frozen, no matter what the external discomfort may be ... or the internal turmoil ...
Very descriptive write, dearest Joe. It pulled me in and touched my heart - in a special Joe way.
Love.
Myra -
knowledge is an ever-bloom,
not that which lives and dies,
a thing that in its change - becomes,
to widen out our eyes,
It lives and breathes and only ends,
when we no longer see its face,
but set it down in time inert,
as if it could exist, in place.
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As the night draws near to the end,
I whisper a slow gentle lullaby,
Say farewell to my long lost friend,
As they dissapear into the moonlit sky.
Such beauty in it's sorry I must admit it also gives alot of insperation, which is needed by someone with writers block.
I know these days, I work in a nursing home and sometimes they're good days sometimes they're bad days. This is gorgeous I must say.
All the best.
Natalia -
Sweetie' sure hope the pass few days have been much better for ya Hon* Somedays sure feel like We are being kicked over over again
don't they?
grrrr But then we come arcoss someone that is extra kind and cheerful and goes out of their way to bring a Lil' smile to our face and We think' gosh the whole world hasn't gone mad after all lol Well anyway you keep your chin up Sweety and do what you do best.. bringing a Smile to people's heart and the rest will take care of it's self Hon ...You expressed your saddness so beautiful Jo Jo ...but as the Winter wind must blow ..that to will subside also ...and the warmth will shine through once again 
Love You Sweetest Pea' Hope your hoilday's are the Merriest! 
~Much Love to You Always~ ~Mina
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Joe
This is extremely beautiful, even with the sadness sprinkled throughout
May your Christmas be as beautiful as your heart
's
Karen
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Oh Joe! This is so sad.
The artistry in this piece is beautiful.....in the poetic, photographic, and design aspects.
I'm sorry you had such a very rotten day, but I'm happy to hear that you're working! I am too. WOO HOO! I've missed you.
Have a wonderful Christmas ~ you dear, sweetheart of a man you! And don't forget - the New Year holds all that's possible - and impossible too!
~~~~~ Love & Blessings, Janet ~~~~~
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This was beautiful, the emotion and descriptive metaphors were superb, a bad day inspired you well. Picture was so fitting and background sort of melded with poem like a surreal mood was melting over your words- excellent- Lola
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My dear friend -Joey-
This was so sad, but within it's sadness, your beautiful heart shines through, not to mention the fact that my bro can write, and write wonderfully indeed! ~Smiles~ I love the tenderness you share here, and you are so talented in displaying the emotions roaring inside you, I mean this was really so expressive, great flow too bro! As you know, I'm a sucker for the smooth, flowing pieces you heart pens, and I really enjoyed this one, keep on keep'n on brother, and I only hope your head lifts alittle higher each day, and you smile a bit longer, for when I see you sad, it makes me sad as well, but I know you're tough, and I'm here whenever you need a friend, for you have lifted my spirits many of times, and for that, I am truly grateful, so always remember, no matter what the problem is, I'm only a prayer away my dear brother... You take care, and I'll read ya later! ~Smiles~
Merry Christmas, and Happy New Year Too! ~Smiles~
Wishing You Only The Best Always!
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I really love the flow of this. I can read it and re-read it without becoming bored. It really holds my attention.
"Lost my smile’s keys"
It seems you really had to search deep for this line and I love it. Keep dreaming in ink.
~*Divine*~ -
two thumbs up
when i first started reading "Knowledge lives and dies so fast," i was like oh...its gunna be another poem on an overused topic but then i read on and it was nothing cliche. Its so descripitive and really paints a picture of a cold winter day. its great. i really like the lines "Sunlight burning waveform songs,Tingling woe filled days," Joey...lol don't ever stop writing! u got real talent...have u considered getting published?
oh p.s...i'm new here...what this whole promote this poem, spend (blank) total and (blank) per click dealie?
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