They said,
"It will make you strong."
It wasn't enough.
A contest entry
- 7 entries, 10 words by notorious.
450 points, ended May 17, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Poems' Wanted!! by SignifyingNothing.
450 points, ended October 19, 2008, 123 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow, this was great. I love how there is so much unspoken, leaving it open to so many interpetations, from the funny and light to the very dark, indeed. This was just so clever. I know it's quite different from some of the deep and descriptive writes that I've put into the finalists list, but I really loved it. So...go to finalists.
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Not sure what the story behind this is, but it made me laugh. There are so many things they told us as kids that I'd love to go back to those people and just smack them over the head. Congrats on the HM for this piece, best of luck in future contests.
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Thank you! There wasn't really a story - I just went from a prompt in a contest.
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I like it
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You know what they say........
"No sense crying over spilled milk!"
Now I know what your theme in life is: "Got milk?"
Good use of 10 words!
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Lol
The liars! Good one.
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A truly unique take on just one simple word--milk!
Hilariously sad...people do always tell you that milk will make you strong, but it depends on the person drinking it as well!
"It wasn't enough" is a great ending full of evocative sadness and it has that air of finality as well.
Suggestion:
"It will make
You strong."
I don't think the 'you' should be capitalized simply because it's a new line (it doesn't even have to be a new line, really).
Capitalizing the first letter of every new line is unnecessary and bespeaks of tradition. I think a line should only be capitalized is if the former ended with a period or it's a new stanza...just my thoughts.
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