I’d skated thin ice with him
long enough
self hating,
I sliced away at his soul
cracks appear,
An angel gone astray
my time had come
to fall…
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A contest entry
- Pic Prompt... bring your creativitiy..... by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended May 18, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a sad take, but well expressed...congrats on the silver!
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This is layered. I found this very deep, and dark and the sadness that runs through it is overwhelming. I love it. It is a fantastic piece of writing and well-desereved of a trophy. Well done.
With
Dark Love
Wayne Leon
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this is such a great write and an excellent take on the prompt. You have really done well here with this, all the best for the contest.
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Ohhh.. I love this take! How we can slice away at someone's soul.. I like how you made it about how she damaged him and not the other way around!! Most excellent!!
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heheh no-one has made mention to the fact that you could easily relate this to a girl hurting a guy ..or a girl going against god and falling
herhehehe...maybe I didnt make it obvious enough but who cares I won silver hehehehe
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Yep I can definitely see that angle.. guess I was avoiding it as it's too close to home lol...
But I've unsuspectingly hurt guys before and it's a dark place to be after...
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Interesting take on the promt. I liked this a lot, very deep and emotional. Well done and good luck.
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Love the ins and out of this.
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Thank you
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mesa likes very much
yay
good luck and take care
stephanie
ur sissy
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Thanks Stef, Yay I likey too hehehe
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Great take on the prompt, amazing imagery, and such powerful words! Good luck xxxx
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Hey thanx darl, Lov'd this pic the minute I saw it
Go jack's lol
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Same lol, i saw it and was like..WOW its so cool! haha xxx
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hehe
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