The thirteenth year of life
I guess it was okay
Now too much pain nor strife
Just living through the day
Now at age fourteen
Life was great
Living up peachy keen
I even had my first date
Fifteen years old
And the misery begins
I watched the pain unfold
With the realization that nobody wins
Sixteen now
And full of cuts
My mother said wow
Your fucking nuts
The seventeenth year
You came into my life
Just to know you were here
Made me put down the knife
Eighteen has finally come
And I'm ready to be free
To guzzle down the rum
And learn how to be me
Nineteen is here
Full of rage
The end is near
Just a turn of the page
Teenage life
And this is it
Hormones and strife
Just not giving a shit
I guess it was okay
Now too much pain nor strife
Just living through the day
Now at age fourteen
Life was great
Living up peachy keen
I even had my first date
Fifteen years old
And the misery begins
I watched the pain unfold
With the realization that nobody wins
Sixteen now
And full of cuts
My mother said wow
Your fucking nuts
The seventeenth year
You came into my life
Just to know you were here
Made me put down the knife
Eighteen has finally come
And I'm ready to be free
To guzzle down the rum
And learn how to be me
Nineteen is here
Full of rage
The end is near
Just a turn of the page
Teenage life
And this is it
Hormones and strife
Just not giving a shit
A contest entry
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Comments
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great i loved it thanks for entering and good luck!
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"Sixteen now
And full of cuts
My mother said wow
Your fucking nuts"
this is my by far my favorite stanza. the way it all flows together and fits into the poem is perfect. the whole poem is full of pain
and small moments of happiness
i love how you put every teenage year into the poem.
each year could be slightly longer to give more detail into that year, show the pain you felt or the happiness you barely feel, but overall it was wonderful and well put together. i love your writing. i agree with everyone else. it was AMAZING!!!!!
))))))))))))))))))))
hope to read more soon
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wow i love this! such a good recount of teenagers! my cuts started at 14 and i'm fitting right into that 16 block. GREAT WRITE thanks for entering!
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Wow. Great work. I'll be putting this on the finalists list. Thanks so much for the entry.
Tay Christine. -
I really liked this piece.
it was well written and had alot of amazing imagery. great job! good luck in the contest!
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this is great!
i love this!
"sixteen now
and full of cuts
wow my mother said,
your fucking nuts!"
absolutely my fav stanza. -
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i agreed with that aye!
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Thank you!!!
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ok i loved it!
so many can relate
great job and so true
kmp -
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thank you so much for the honorable mention!!
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I've got to say, maybe I'm a lil proud of myself, considering, I've not had one of those bad things done in my life
. Being a teenager makes you more capable of physical technicalities, if you have the strength in your body, and willing is your mind, not a 40+ year old chump with all the experience in the world can compare to the worthy life you can live. Great write miss, thank you for entering.
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Simply stated but true to life. I believe my "misery" began at age 15 as well.
Some grammar corrections:
Line 3: "Now to much pain nor strife"
-->Possibly "Not too much pain nor strife"?
Line 16: "Your fucking nuts"
-->"You're fucking nuts"
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Being 17 right now, I can say that you basically hit the nail on the head. Not saying every teen drinks and cutss, but every teen fucks up a little, teenage years are about making mistakes.
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this was gorgeous.
I love the way it flows you had me from the first stanza...great job and keep writing -
Sych a great poem. Loved it, the stages of life are all diffrent and it was great to see this.
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I lYkD dIs AlOt!!iM 14 n YeA i Do ThInGs WiT oUt GiViN a ShYt All Da TiMe!!GrEat WrItE!!cHeCk OuT sUm Of My PoEmS!!...


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You did an exellent job on your poem


I really like the rhyme and rhythm
Splendidly done indeed.
Best of wishes to you



Tony


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WOW
i like it
i turned 13 5 months ago


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This is really good.
I really like it!
I turn 14 tomorrow!)

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Happy Birthday!!!! My birthday was Today also! I'm glad you liked my poem and I hope you had a great birthday!
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sht man...this is actually good!lol na I liked it nice work
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