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Teenage life

The thirteenth year of life
I guess it was okay
Now too much pain nor strife
Just living through the day

Now at age fourteen
Life was great
Living up peachy keen
I even had my first date

Fifteen years old
And the misery begins
I watched the pain unfold
With the realization that nobody wins

Sixteen now
And full of cuts
My mother said wow
Your fucking nuts

The seventeenth year
You came into my life
Just to know you were here
Made me put down the knife

Eighteen has finally come
And I'm ready to be free
To guzzle down the rum
And learn how to be me

Nineteen is here
Full of rage
The end is near
Just a turn of the page

Teenage life
And this is it
Hormones and strife
Just not giving a shit

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  • RainShatteredDreams
    November 6
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    great i loved it thanks for entering and good luck!

    -Mary-


  • Scars-On-Her-Arms
    November 5

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    "Sixteen now
    And full of cuts
    My mother said wow
    Your fucking nuts"

    this is my by far my favorite stanza. the way it all flows together and fits into the poem is perfect. the whole poem is full of pain and small moments of happiness i love how you put every teenage year into the poem.

    each year could be slightly longer to give more detail into that year, show the pain you felt or the happiness you barely feel, but overall it was wonderful and well put together. i love your writing. i agree with everyone else. it was AMAZING!!!!! ))))))))))))))))))))

    hope to read more soon


  • X.brokenlover.X
    November 4

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    wow i love this! such a good recount of teenagers! my cuts started at 14 and i'm fitting right into that 16 block. GREAT WRITE thanks for entering!


  • LullabyOfADeadMan
    October 17

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    Wow. Great work. I'll be putting this on the finalists list. Thanks so much for the entry.

    Tay Christine.

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    August 10
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    I really liked this piece. it was well written and had alot of amazing imagery. great job! good luck in the contest!


  • black-phenoqu
    July 14

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    this is great!

    i love this!
    "sixteen now
    and full of cuts
    wow my mother said,
    your fucking nuts!"
    absolutely my fav stanza.


  • Maggie Kay
    June 24

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    ok i loved it!
    so many can relate
    great job and so true
    kmp


  • Lively Matter
    June 23

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    I've got to say, maybe I'm a lil proud of myself, considering, I've not had one of those bad things done in my life . Being a teenager makes you more capable of physical technicalities, if you have the strength in your body, and willing is your mind, not a 40+ year old chump with all the experience in the world can compare to the worthy life you can live. Great write miss, thank you for entering.


  • DAMSELx
    July 5, 2008
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    Simply stated but true to life. I believe my "misery" began at age 15 as well.

    Some grammar corrections:
    Line 3: "Now to much pain nor strife"
    -->Possibly "Not too much pain nor strife"?
    Line 16: "Your fucking nuts"
    -->"You're fucking nuts"

    --DAMSELx


  • Blooming Poet
    June 12, 2008

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    Being 17 right now, I can say that you basically hit the nail on the head. Not saying every teen drinks and cutss, but every teen fucks up a little, teenage years are about making mistakes.


  • I Am Gun
    May 28, 2008

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    this was gorgeous.
    I love the way it flows you had me from the first stanza...great job and keep writing


  • Suicide Hotline
    May 27, 2008
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    Sych a great poem. Loved it, the stages of life are all diffrent and it was great to see this.


  • DeSiBoO14
    May 20, 2008

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    I lYkD dIs AlOt!!iM 14 n YeA i Do ThInGs WiT oUt GiViN a ShYt All Da TiMe!!GrEat WrItE!!cHeCk OuT sUm Of My PoEmS!!...


  • thepoetssoul
    May 19, 2008

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    You did an exellent job on your poem
    I really like the rhyme and rhythm
    Splendidly done indeed.
    Best of wishes to you

    Tony


  • EmoAngel14
    May 19, 2008
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    WOW

    i like it
    i turned 13 5 months ago


  • myheartbait
    May 18, 2008
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    This is really good.
    I really like it!
    I turn 14 tomorrow!)


    • Leanna-bean
      May 19, 2008
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      Happy Birthday!!!! My birthday was Today also! I'm glad you liked my poem and I hope you had a great birthday!


  • shecantstopfalling.
    May 17, 2008
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    sht man...this is actually good!lol na I liked it nice work

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