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Exposed

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Your pasted smile

lends a certain air of ridicule and

far be it from me, to offer you

 

even a stark

red cent for your thoughts.

 

Dispassionate opinions are

laid to bare by circumstances

caught

in the rivalry of two hearts

uncovered

 

we are stripped

of naivete', at this point,

unclothed by

carnal hungers, gnawing at us

like a pride of famished lions.

 

Unadorned passion calls,

pleasures in a sense, remain obvious

to us both.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt-naked.

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • EdP
    June 2
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    quite good

    I don't like famished lions and would prefer hungry hyenas


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    June 1

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    love the close of this one MJ, a wonderful entry here and i thank you for it...



    al

  • grannyeri gold member
    May 30

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    Great metaphors used in these lines; good flow and vivid visual images throughout. Good flow and interpretation of this contest prompt.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    May 19

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    Well done here. Impressive work my dear MJ..impressive.

    Best wishes in all you do.

    Love
    Passions


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 18

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    Gosh.. that was full of strong feelings.. at first I thought it was anger, and then it turned to desire!! I guess that happens doesn't it!

    Love the intensity of this write!


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 18

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    I really liked the way you've managed to present so many different nuances of naked here, Michael... there is indeed a nakedness that goes beyond the physical.. thoughts and intentions also laid bare. Wonderful, sensitive take on the prompt.

    ~ Nicolette


  • jadedsnapdragon gold member
    May 17
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    Great use of imagery here. Well done. Good luck in the contest.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    May 17

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    Your words most certainly meet the requirements of the contest. They were strong and direct.

    My best wishes to you in the contest dear.

    Always
    Margaret

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