Bitter regret,
melding with the sweet
innocince of childhood.
A jagged reminder
that love
isn't the tender thing
it used to be
so long ago.
Waiting for just
the right moment to
set yourself free,
you look to the
stars to find the path
leading from
loss to hope.
but suddenly its gone
and you're back
where you started.
Searching for
the broken pathway of
foresaken dreams...
A contest entry
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Comments
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It's probably just me but it probably would have been better if you combined some of the lines, it would have been easier to read. Other then that I really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for entering.
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Excellent
Great write. I felt imersed in your words. Great job!
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Oooo
I really really like this! The simplicity of the words used just adds to richness of the poem. I love the emotion and depth this piece has. Great job!
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