Hand in hand.
Hundreds of eyes, SURPRISE!
Her heart lurches.
She sees the past
creep up to haunt her,
shame embraces once again.
Only secret ever kept from him
is in this room,
has caught her eye.
Hidden memories
of forbidden lovemaking
come running back.
So long ago
SUDDENLY
not long enough.
She now knows
how much she stands to lose.
Sweeps everything away
with a blink of lids.
Never has she felt so NAKED...
Author notes
- 75 words or less
- Write something unique
- Strong use of solid imagery
- Left alignment
- Free verse only
- Any subject matter
- Please do not post any images with your poem
- Simple background
- The prompt is the word "Naked"
- The poem above is only an example not the prompt
- Catagorize adult material appropriately
In a list
A contest entry
- Naked by AJ Morelli.
2500 points, ended June 3, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrites (with clause) by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended July 12, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - by Midnight-x-Rose.
450 points, ended July 13, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - This time I'm going to WIN!!! by darlintlc.
900 points, ended August 30, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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How often our past mistakes come back to haunt us...sometimes at the most unwanted times! ha!
Loved the way you wrote this it made you pause and see what was happenning at that anniversary surprize party!
I can "almost feel sorry for her" almost!
Thanks for entering
darlintlc
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I like how this is different to pretty much all the other entries you see here. I like the feelings behind this and although I didn't get a 'wow' I enjoyed this.
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I can quite easily get the feel of the piece -
and while it was well written it doesn't stand out for me as I would like.
Constructively there is nothing I can say, it is well done -
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I appreciate your comment and honestly. Thanks for keeping it real.
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WOW! Very good.
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thanks for the entry... line breaks, punctuation would help this a lot and an ellipses is only three dots...
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This poem has wonderful imagery. I like the way the story unfolds. Great take on the prompt
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nice
I'm not comfortable with free verse either, but based on this, your imagery is very solid. very simple, yet conveys a certain message. -
This was very beautiful
I applaud your efforts, and your artistry.
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Once again an outstanding piece by my fave. The imagery was clear and it was short story told well. Welldone, a great write and i enjoyed reading it x
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'shame embraces once again
only secret ever kept from him
is in this room'
This is fantastic!
I am a freak for free verse and I would agree that this has turned out very well. However, I tripped up over this little bit when I read it the first time and it's a shame becasue after I read it slowly again it turned out to be my favorite part, except for the ending becasue it wasn't a ending I was expecting and it realy made me think.
brillliant poem I think the restrictions you had were wquite difficult and to write something like this well It's very good well done. -
i really like this. its simple, easy to follow and relatable. Its brilliant! very well written and provides awesome imagry
thanks for sharing!
TIffnay
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Very nice take on the prompt... I think we all know the feeling of helpless nakedness where we feel totally exposed even it's just in our own mind... Nicely written... All the best in the contest...
Ken
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This rocks! I absolutly LOVE it! The title is perfect...the beginning pulls the reader right in...seriously by line 4 there is no turning back, lol. I love how unique it is. FANTASTIC take on the prompt! Good luck in the contest....I may have to mosey on over and check out the other entries....this here seems hard to beat!
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Wow great job! Very realistic write!
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