the words that were once hanging in the air
have left.
for they are stapled
to the inside of my heart.
hiding.
for fear that the wrong person will get their message.
and that those words will be belittled
by the desperate cries
of their each and every letter.
and the only way i will let them out
is if you become the person
whom you once were.
Author notes
not my best....but i guess it's alright for a blurb of what i'm feeling right now...:S
A contest entry
- letting it out... a quickie... (more the merrier) by righteousme.
300 points, ended May 20, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites. by She Stole My Voice.
300 points, ended September 21, 2008, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"for they are stapled
to the inside of my heart."
Ouch.
I love this whole poem.
Honestly, I can't think of my favorite part because there are just too many.
Thanks for entering cupcake :]
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marawr!
this was feirce! i like the whole stapled thing, and the whole time i was reading it i had this image of the inside of someones haart being ripped out and the skin torn off! very beautiful love, i can see why u won gold!
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the last three lines are not especially conclusive: however, though this poem is *not* your best, it has the sense of urgency and directness which i am coming to see as the defining characteristic of your poetry. overall, a fairly strong write, given that it's just for catharsis.
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aww emotion is pouring off the page here. good job and good luck hun.
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Hey, I like the title of this piece it's very to the point! Your poem is beautiful and well written. I love the lines:
the words that were once hanging in the air
have left. for they are stapled to the inside of my heart" - These are amazing and really took my breath away! Good luck in the contest I really hope you do well.
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"for they are stapled
to the inside of my heart.
hiding.
for fear that the wrong person will get their message."
Jesus.
I have no idea of what to say.
Those lines are amazing.
I hope you win :}
♥
~Princess of Shadows~ -
kool
those were big words but it was still awsome -
Your breaks in the poem are wonderful! The first five lines are fantastic. Words intangable and floating in the air are suddenly locked away inside of you. I really enjoyed this. Thanks!
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"the words that were once hanging in the air
have left.
for they are stapled
to the inside of my heart..."
Strong and compelling work poet! I like the structure of this and the thought that went into the penning. Good luck in the contest!
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love it
I am a huge fan of free form prose. Sometimes rhyme doesn't fit, free form allows more expression in my opinion. Great job.
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