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This Her Need

Missing image

Unlock my chains
break my walls.
Tear down the damage
so your rose may grow.




Trapped in memories
words, I can't speak.
My mind says run
from me.



My heart says
never leave me.
Without this love
bound i will be.




Only paradise holds
the key.
Replace the hard steel
with soft healing cloth.


 

For in your hands
this rose is free.
To be entwined
bound to her lover.



This is her need



Author notes

Written for my paradise,Xianaria

A contest entry

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  • sandybeaches gold member
    June 17
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    lovely! ***Pam***

  • luv2dream gold member
    June 3
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    very beautiful poem!!


  • Xianaria gold member
    June 3

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    Congrats

    To the Queen of Honorable Mentions, Salute!

    I'm always here to help you, just give me that smile you know that gets me all ummm...

    "My heart says
    never leave me.
    Without this love
    bound i will be."

    I'm not going anywhere.

    I love you~
    Tim

  • Ithica silver member
    June 2

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    A beautiful write!!! And it was a pleasure to read... I wouldn't change a thing... You may have overshot the limit a bit for the contest rules, but they don't apply to your lovers heart... There I believe you have hit your mark! Thank-you for entering! cia

  • jgrayson-au
    June 1
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    Slight issue, it's like 73 words long... :/

    • xianariaslifetime gold member
      June 2
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      I didnt realize i must have just went with my heart, i dont think its over sixty with the breaks it could be more?
      Oops but i still hope to be concidered.
      Thank for pointing this.

      • jgrayson-au
        June 2

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        Sorry didn't mean to be abrupt before, I was in a hurry (getting ready for uni). It's a nice little poem you've written.

  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    May 31

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    Lovely work here and good luck
    to you with it in my contest!
    Thanks a lot for your entry
    here, I appreciate it!




    Jeremy0826

  • tomisb gold member
    May 20

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    Lovely twist on the picture and a delightful series of images. Good use of a first person voice.
    Love, Tom B.


  • Xianaria gold member
    May 18
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    You amaze me...

    My Dearest Lifetime~

    The way you pour your heart out so deep in these few lines is incredible...My heart was being tugged at as I read these words. I love the last part, yes my rose: you are free, free from the things that bound you, and you are one with me ~ I will not leave you, nor forsake you.

    Your Xianaria

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