Please come in

Innocent beings,

unaware

of lurking darkness.

Hypnotised puppets,

following requests

for needing invitations

to enter.

Commencing through

invisible barriers,

I summon thee.

Creamsin skin glows,

fangs penetrate,

pulses speed.

Drinking the sweet victory,

transforming you into my Queen of darkness.

Author notes

Picture Prompt: The ones that Kill you by ~medieval-vampire121

Quote: Not all Vampires are bad, its the good ones that kill you....

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Lowercase Prelude
August 12

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Your imagery and word usage was great
They painted such a dark picture that the reader could visualize
peregrin
August 2
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Very good, i like the flow,
and it is a very nice write!
Haunted-Memory
August 1

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Excellent
This is excellent you have captured the picture and the promt here and given the reader a fantast poem to read. well done (Brian).
SoldiersRain
July 16
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Hahaha, I greatly enjoyed this poem. My girlfriend often refers to me as her vampire. Great job.
PurplePixie
July 7
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WOW this is an AMAZING poem!!!
Missa
July 2
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awsome! i loved it!
Poetic Tasha
June 1

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ooooh well done

Tasha
PhantomsAngel87
May 25

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I'll be your Queen of Darkness hun
Spooky but so wicked

♥
Stay safe
Love ya
~Manda
Nakatrea
May 21

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I love vampires. A very good vampire poem. And great take on the prompt. I really liked it. the pic is creepy though...

Kat
Lucy.
May 17

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Oooh, scary! 'fangs penetrate' had me squirming in my seat. Great write.
kiwigirljacks
May 17
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Eeeeppp lol... spooky vampire story!! Wonderful hun
Jeremy0826
May 17

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Well done my dear friend!
I love the life that you brought
to this picture through your words
here! Lovely take and good luck!

Jeremy0826
unsigned
May 17
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Very nice...

Vampires .....gotta love us!

Simon
whispernthedark
May 17

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Your imagery is wonderful, best of luck to you in this contest.

♥
whisper
SuicidalLover
May 17

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Oooo...Nice! I like the darkness swallowing the people. Very dark. *grins* Thanks for entering.
~Kystal Angel