Staring into open space
With empty dreams of you
It doesn't seem too far from Hell
As I look into this lonely view
I'm ripping out my bleeding eyes
These thoughts within my mind,
Are released into the air around
'Til I'm caught in their constricting bind
What will it take for thoughts of us
To be lost into the past?
When others passed so easily
In my heart, you seem to last
It shrouds my world in darkness
These holes left by unrequited pain
When it seems the wounds are healing now
Jealousy once again sets them to flames
Author notes
OPTION 21::_
Heart brake, forbidden love, unrequited love. and all that jazz.
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Comments
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nice write =]
thanks for entering!
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oh wow...this is exactly what I'm looking for. Great rhyme scheme, excellent choice of words, good rythm...and I love the emotion in it...Excellent job, and this will make it in the finals of my contest. Beautiful write, and good luck
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Thanks alot, I'm glad you liked it =]
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i really felt what you were
trying to convey here.
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thank you for entering.
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That was nice. I could really feel it. Good luck!
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Very nice entry, wonderful take on the prompt. Best of luck in my contest.
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Jealousy once again sets them to flames
that line just totally connected with me i understand it completly it just really makes sence to me cuase im in that situation
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Loved this poem! Really dramatic, "I'm ripping out my bleeding eyes" in a good way of course!
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