"Married?! Huh you'll be handcuffed"
I denied it, but was wrong
Wedding bands should be around the wrists
You're locked down, tied to your partner.
And, like in gaol, have sex in the shower.
But
In the end
I love it
...and her
Author notes
43 words.
A contest entry
- Fifty [50] Words by Ithica.
525 points, ended June 2, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is a nice little poem also, liked the ending.
In the end
I love it
...and her
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I also thought this was a clever insight into the extremely narrow views of marriage these days... I'm glad you found happiness instead of restriction... Thak-you for entering!
cia
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I totally disagree with ShadowOfTheNight. I thought this was a really clever piece. It works on many levels and the more I read it the more I love it. The comment that this is "just not very good" defies belief in my opinion. This poem shows insight, beauty and humour - I love it!
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Thank you again for your comments. To play devil's advocate for Shadow... They are entitled to their opinion and, as a stand alone, it may very well not be the best (I like it, but what do I know
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The main thing is it wasn't a 'freewrite' but a specific ruled poem. (Image prompt and line limit).... I hope in that sense, with the limits, it stands better.
Regardless, than you again for your kind words BabyBun. Appreciated.
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Im sorry but
i dont like this at all. its....just not very good. but thats just my opinion, it doesnt really matter what i think in the end. It s your words, if you like them stand by them -
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Do you understand that it was an image prompt competition, and that the image prompt was handcuffs and roses?
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