She can't see what she's doing , more to the point she lies, denying to herself the truth as her body slowly dies
She doesnt think its harmful, the tv always lies - its just a way to scare us, a way to make us cry
She cannot hear her children as their aching lungs can't breathe, instead the sound of children's laughter, is a potent, coughing wheeze
She didnt read the warnings, she didnt hear our cries, a potent cause of cancer - the truth she did despise
She didnt hear them crying - her children in the hall, if only she had put it out she'd still be with us all
Author notes
May new members contest poem - i have chosen option three and have decided to write about
"world no tobacco day"
A contest entry
- May New Members Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended June 7, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering the contest
It is nice to see someone do something a little different. I think that the no tobacco day is an excellent way to raise awareness for the illnesses that can cause.
Excellent use of punctuation and explanation.
Welcome to allpoetry and enjoy the site
Good luck in the contest
Faerie
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welcome to allpoetry
thanks for entering the contest, and this is an interesting write, and so very truthful.
well done, and good luck.
cheers
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Welcome To AP
Hello adam2008,
Aw, this makes me want to give you a hug
This was so very deep, and painful. Yet I am sure that so many can relate to it..
Well done.
Kari,
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I really love your poems, you have such a nice, simple style of writing yet the message behind your poems is so clear. Keep going!
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Wow! This poem really took note with me, because my Grandma smoked to relieve her stress..she died and I never had a chance to meet her. Your poem was well written and really conveys how smoking affects everyone.
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my mum smokes, when i was writing it she was coughing downstairs, i know its only a matter of time before we lose her .. i just hope the message somehow gets through
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Wow, this says so much and you make a very valid and important point. I think everyone should be aware of this. Good luck in the contest
~Diana
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i liked that a lot. it was very well written. i have never tried any types of drugs or anyhting. never even sipped a beer.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Quite an interesting write, you have taken a big society and health issue and wrote about it so easily it makes me think twice about those who smoke (I personally don't but know many who do)
Great write
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Enjoy AllPoetry
Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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