Fearing consequences
tears fall hard
enveloped by heartache
belts, whips, and fists fly
innocence lost
Author notes
15 Words
Picture Prompt from Photobucket
A contest entry
- - Speak from Spirit in 15 Words - by Desire.
700 points, ended May 21, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Fearful
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times and after reading Your words I kept seeing words: Foster Care
it is like this feeling of down the street-
kept hearing: discipline out of control...reference to not legal~ Seeing words: Authorities ignore
something to the effect of prominence-
Hearing words like: It will make You Stronger-
Take it like a Man...etc...
but unfortunately seeing a gun to head- whether metaphor or reality because unable to take the visions anymore
Hopefully that makes sense
Powerful images You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
enveloped by heartache,
Magnificent Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~~*~
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Innocence lost indeed. So sad children face such consequence; to be told they are wrong is bad enough...many find even that too much to understand and take in...what minds think that are treat in this way....well its too much for me to pereive! Captured well.
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Sad but true, the innocent suffer ~ people who do these things don't look at the cost. Nice job ~ good luck in the contest!
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You got me all fired up with this one!!! Children should be cherished and loved...they should never have to live in fear of anything!!! Well done and best of luck here but this is GOLD in my eyes!!
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WONDERFUL, MY FRIEND. TO OFTEN AND TOO TRUE. WE HAVE LOST THE MEANING OF LOVE. WE ARE TO BE PITIED AS HUMANS, FOR OUR INHUMANITY TO OUR CHILDREN AND FELLOWMAN. THANKS FOR SHARING.
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