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daydream feelings

Slowly unwinding in grotesque hand, A flourishing flower from distant lands,
The sun won't shine, because it harbors inside of me and you,
Slowly shining through sides of me anew,
I realize that you're beautiful, magical and true,

Tranquil are the eyes that hide behind long darken hair,
hidden in the woods but kissing like in open air,
We might be from totally different worlds,

But when love is true their can be no holding in,,

the sun's shining inside and our hearts are smoldering

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  • ShelleyA gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    A good write. Heartfelt. Good interpretation of the picture prompt. Good imagery, flow and tone. Nice rhyme. Lovely depth of feeling. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Thank you for your entry.