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I Don't Hear the Music

I walk along this old side road
Up to a gateway once inlaid with gold
Only to find the remnants of a time long gone

Wild roses line the ruins of
An ancient wall holding up nothing above
And at the door: a merchant selling religious wares

And as I enter thru the door, warped by time and acts of war
I can't help but notice
Silence...

(Chorus:)
I don't hear the music once played here anymore
No longer is the chorus alive like before
The lack of sound is overwhelming...

The inner chamber is dimly lit
And on worn pews a lonely few sit
Muttering prayers they had learned when they were young

Images of saints don the walls
The names of which I know none at all
And I see Christ with out-stretched arms hanging high above...

And I can't help but wonder, how long since He'd heard voices thunder
Or the sound of a simple chord
Ring...

(Repeat Chorus)


I don't hear the music once played here anymore

 

/break/ 

 

As I wander thru this place
I see an old man with a solemn face
Quietly sweeping the dust of ages from the floor

He moves about, paying no mind
Cleaning up what others leave behind
And disposes of it, never to be seen again

And I can't help but wonder if he ever heard voices thunder
Or the sound of a simple chord
Ring...

I turned to leave, he gave a nod and gentle smile
People come and go but he's here all the while
He's like God tending to our souls 'til we come back again

(Repeat Chorus)

(Chorus 2:)
I don't hear the music in me anymore
I long to feel the chorus scream like before
Lord, the lack of You is overwhelming
I know I'm running out of time...
Renew me, Lord, I want to hear the music once more


(Chorus 3/close:) 

I don't hear the music in me anymore
I long to feel the chorus scream like before
Lord, the lack of You is overwhelming
I know I'm running out of time...
Renew me, Lord, I want to hear the music...
I want to hear the music...
I want to hear the music...
Renew me, Lord, I want to hear the music
Once more

Author notes

Inspired from my trip to Mexico City in '05, wandering through old Catholic churches. Many of the images in these lyrics are actual things I'd seen.

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  • individuality gold member
    October 9
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  • individuality gold member
    October 9

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    does grammar and punctuation not matter? you speak to me with sarcastic tiones... this piece lacks everything - yet it is smiling with cups. before speaking to me with general tones of i clicked in etc know who i am


    • Xianaria gold member
      October 9
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      These are lyrics, there is very little need for proper punctuation ~
      as for the grammar? Not sure if I follow... Being in lyrical form, again, it does not need to follow standardized formats...

      I know who you are
      But my Love, the one I dedicate most of my work to, considers Me the "King of AP"


  • Mango Memories
    July 26
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    ohh... me likes i do.

    You know what i hate?

    Long poetry...

    You know what i love?

    Long poetry that makes me not hate it


  • upperworld06
    March 11

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    awesome, the trip must have been great. only thing i found is that you didn't spell out through, other than that great song, i really like the part about the old man. nice job and thanks for entering


  • dustytiger
    March 5

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    you are most definatly a very talented song writer, i'm glad that you have so much stuff in this contest cause it's really letting me get to see what you've got, it's all so fab


  • logorrhoea
    September 6, 2008

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    Moving Some beautifully classical images conveyed here, I won't say much but I can see how personal they are to you, and they make greatly touching lyrics.


  • superstition
    September 2, 2008

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    These lyrics are absolutely stunning!! I loved how you personalized those last choruses to yourself, realizing that the fire was burning low and needed the ashes stirred again. The imagery in this was incredible. I feel like I went to that church with you...I feel like I saw everything that you saw...and I've never even been in a Catholic church before. I guess I have now. Thank you for the tour...

    • Xianaria gold member
      September 2, 2008
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      honestly, i'm not catholic so visiting those churches in mexico city was a first for me as well. thank you for your comments!

      ~ tim


  • Night Terrors
    September 1, 2008

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    wow what a powerful song! It made me kinda of sad. I liked the double meaning. That this could be an almost abandoned church or your own soul that has lost the spark. I love praise and whorship it helps me stay happy . Thanks so much for entering this and congrades your a finalist.


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    August 19, 2008

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    Amazing, I wish I could hear this... I almost can in the background, but I'm sure it's nothing like the real thing. It is so true, how faith is running low these days, we need a mega charge it seems.. When will He come I wonder...

    Amber


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    August 18, 2008
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    I enjoyed this. Nice flow (which is important since it's a song)


  • l33t-n1nj4
    August 17, 2008

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    aaah geeze so I really enjoyed it and it had alot of passion but you got lucky that it is lyrics or I would be deleting due to line number. I can make the acception for lyrics since it is hard to sing a song in 20 or 30 lines. ANYWAYS....this was very pretty. Full of emotion...just the way I like them. you did a wondeful job very deserving of all its rewards. Best of luck and thanks for entering.


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    August 17, 2008

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    look here Mr. save some trophys for me lol
    Again baby i am proud of your talent and you!
    Hugs
    and
    love
    your
    ~Lifetime~


  • -shiningstars-
    August 15, 2008

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    I nearly cried. this is such an amazing write. it's not depressing, well i guess in a sense it is because the lack of God in this place screams almost as loud as if He were.... You just did such an amazing job at using your God given talent of writing at your disposal. Amazing
    ~mackenzie
    good luck


  • crivanea silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    lol.i'm getting quite a few song poems in here..intersting piece.;.although i'm asking for a poem..not quite looking for chorus ..nice imagery though..good luck in the contest


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    July 11, 2008

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    well a welll deserved gold... wow this was a wonderful read i like this.. i hit random on here and came across this.. i like it alot.. maybe some day ill hear it on the radio.... tillthen keep penning... thanks for sharing this with us..................... hugs...


  • Peripatetic gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    I am moved by this song of the magnificence that has been and for which one may still yearn. I am impressed by the old sanctuary as a metaphor of your relationship with God. It is something to which many may relate, and so this poem may touch and cause a chord to reverberate in all the souls who read it.
    "People come and go but he's here all the while
    He's like God tending to our souls 'til we come back again"
    These lines with those foregoing describing the old fellow and his acts of grace for the mess that others make stand out in this song of a journey through present reality toward a finer hope.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    Excellent write here

    You have penned a true masterpiece and the thoughts which dwells in few yet are in the minds of those who feel the pain about you as he does every day


  • xPink-Lotusx
    May 17, 2008

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    Definitely unique! Most different from anything I have gotten so far.. And its good! Thanks for the entry, and much luck to you in this contest!

    • Xianaria gold member
      May 24, 2008
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      Thank you :)

      I wrote this based on a trip to Mexico city where my then-wife dragged me to all these churches that were wonderful to look at, with their gold, statues, architecture, etc, but they were old, silent, museums showcasing a forgotten time...There was a wall, broken, standing alone, lined by yellow roses, and there was an older gentleman sweeping the floor of one church, those images are still with me. I took that which I saw and turned it inward, so the music that was silent wasn't just in those old buildings, but also withing myself, my soul's longing as it were.

      Thank you for your comment. I hope others get something from it as well.

      Xianaria

  • Soft-Rain gold member
    May 17, 2008
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    Outstanding!

    A true songwriter! I absoulutly love the ironic twist you did on the prompt! This makes your music for this contest a uninqe peice.
    The lyrics is so amazing, makes the readers hear about the meaning,even if the Title says

    "I Don't Hear the Music"

    My friend you have true talent, always belive in yourself and the let your music flow to all.

    Wow is all i can say.

    Your,
    Lifetime

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