Streams sound serenity
In springs gentle sun.
The sparrows sing
A solemn song.
Dandelions sway
In a gentle breeze,
as the willow weeps
The worlds wounds.
Author notes
Option #3 Define serenity as you perceive it
A contest entry
- This is my PIF! Week-end quickie...prompts posted! 30 words... by butterflywriter.
535 points, ended May 23, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Gentle and serene. I enjoyed the feel of this write. Your use of alliteration makes the words fall off the tongue in a smooth rhythm. Well done.
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Nice poem of peacefulness. I see you won a trophy, congratulations.
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i like this, great job ^^
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carefree and moving.... of youth and nature.
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a good poem with a ncie use of alliteration flowing along the curve of the rhythm. serenity smiles softly
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Very well done. A nice peacful piece.
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nice alliteration
thanks for entering
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